Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Do you remember when you were young, I do. Id give anything to go back just to fall in love with the man whos now my husband of 15 years. We met in high school and I knew it was love at first site, I was friends with his girlfriend at that time and envied her every time I saw her with him. He was one of those guys that you felt like you were falling into a black abyss for and would die if you didnt have him. Well before I go on any further let me introduce myself to you, my name is Crystal Rivers I'am not as young as I used to be but however I never regreat falling in love with Jonathon Summers.
"Hey Crystal." Yelled my best friend Amber Jenkins. I looked in the direction I had heard her voice, she was trying to make her way through the chaotic cluster of students in her way.
Okay...well that is an interesting choice for a prologue there. To me it doesn't really read like a normal prologue would and it seems to be geared just a little bit more towards something more like maybe a blurb or a plot summary ish. Its not a full sort of plot summary, there is some sort of premise like quality there as well but that still doesn't really work as a prologue.
Of course all of that being said, this is still a pretty interesting paragraph there. There's certainly quite some potential there to turn it into a very interesting prologue because as it stands it does get your attention well, it just doesn't fully work the way a prologue should be working.
The tiny peek we've got there of the first chapter seems solid enough. There's not really enough to come to any sort of conclusion on how this might be as a story but it seems like a good start and with that prologue you have there it does add to the intrigue around where this might go. So on the whole, I think you've got something decent here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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