Process Note: I wrote this for fiction class and need to expand it to 3 pages next week. I'm just really stuck and don't know where to take it. I'd love a critique on what I have and maybe suggestions on where you think it could go after expansion?? I'm thinking the old man teaches the character a lesson, but I don't know what, yet. Thanks!!
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I knew how to fish.
This is what I didn’t tell Joe. I knew how to fish. My dad bought me a tiny child’s pole when I was just four. I think it had Micky Mouse on it. He cast it for me, hooked the worm.
I knew how to fish.
I wasn’t a pro, by any stretch of the imagination, but I’d caught a few smallmouth bass in my day, a few pikes. I’d read on the sidelines, sometimes hold a pole, but I could do it. It had taken me a while to touch the worms myself – because fake bait was for chumps, said dad – but I did it eventually. I’d fold it, wrap it around the lure. Sometimes it came off and fell off the side of the boat, swimming, sinking.
“I see you steadied the boat real nice,” my cousin joked, pointing at the boat in the garage. We all looked. The boat was almost completely on its side in the garage, as if they’d purposefully rocked the boat before lifting it.
I laughed. We all sit around a high fire, which crackled with tiny explosions.
“We were too tired from our jackpot day of fishing,” my uncle said, sipping his beer. He had flakes of sunburned skin coming off on his forehead.
“Speaking of, did you see Joe’s sign out front?”
I didn’t know who Joe was, but I’d seen a sign on a walk with my dog. My grandparent’s cabin sat on a bay with a dozen other houses on the same road. I always walked the mile down to the mailboxes.
“Fishing partner needed,” Joe’s sign said, with a phone number underneath. The sign was neon and thick, the kind you bought at those special craft stores.
My aunt cackled, shaking her head. “Who puts a sign on the road asking for a fishing partner.” She folds her arms over an expansive belly. “I mean, doesn’t he have any friends?”
“No,” grandma said from the other side of the fire. “Not much family, either.”
“Like, have some pride, man,” uncle said.
“It’s pathetic.”
I looked at the firelit faces of my family and wondered if this was one of those rare times that they were wrong. Because all I could think was how I would do the same if I was an old man who loved to fish but had no partner.
And so, I’d called him. I’d called him and offered to be his fishing partner.
“Never learned how to fish?” Joe said, as if I just professed to never pissing in the woods. I held the thick landline to my ear and clumped its twisty chord in my fingers, waiting for him to say something else. “Well,” he just sighed. “You’d better come borrow my Fishing Encyclopedia, cause we don’t wanna waste time while we’re out there, ya hear?”
I didn’t need it; I knew all the fish in these parts. But I ran three houses down and grabbed it from the rocking chair on the old man’s porch. I tried to wave at him in the garden, but he turned his back and threw a clump of weeds over the fence.
“Be ready at five tomorrow,” he hollered when I’d reached the end of the driveway.
I got home and cracked the Encyclopedia to the first page.
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