Published December 18, 2012
The sound is different for everyone; it varies from person to person. The sound is not something you are born with, nor something you choose on a lark; but rather, something you discover along the journey of life. The sound is perfect, perfect for you. For each unique listener, similarly, there is a unique sound.
To the new mother, the sound comes at the break of dawn. She wakes to the sound, throwing off the last vestige of sleep. As she walks, almost by rote, towards the source of the sound, she smiles. Though awaken by the sound, it reminds her of her darling child, her miracle.
To the girlfriend, the sound is her safe place. As she leans into the chest of her protector, the sound lulls her to sleep. The sound, for her, is not simply that of one melody, one noise. Her lullaby is the sound of the strong, steady heartbeat of her love intermingled with the soothing tones of his singing.
To the confused teenager, the sound is something of his own making. The sound is his way of releasing his feelings, those feelings of frustration and love and melancholy and exuberance, into the world. The sound is his soul being poured out through the use of lyrics and sheet music filled to the brim. The sound is his creation.
To the child, the sound is one of comfort. The sound brings tales of dashing pirates and sweet princesses and happy endings. The sound lulls them into the world of dreams, into the world of possibilities and imagination.
To the old man, the sound is a reminder. With the sound comes the memory of a first love. The memory of them waltzing beneath the tree, their humming creating the soundtrack of the memory. With the sound comes the memory of a good, happy life.
To the overworked adult, the sound is a respite. The sound acts as a break from reality. Be it the genre of rock, pop, country, or even heavy metal, the sound relaxes them. The sound enables them to release the burdens of a day’s hard work in order to move on to the next task.
The sound is always there. It is a constant presence for every living being. The sound can be whatever one needs it to. It is simply a matter of finding the sound; or, more importantly, stopping and listening so the sound can find you in your time of need.
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I don't know what you call this. Is this an essay? Because of this is an essay, it tells such a good 'story'. Ugh, my mind is so groggy right now, I don't know how to review this work properly. xD Sorry. I don't know if you call this a metaphor, but the way you used the 'sound' to describe many things for people of different ages and yet only one thing at the same time, which is 'a place of comfort and peace' in my understanding, is wonderful. This makes this piece easily relatable to the reader, because everyone always has such a place inside of them. This is imaginative as well. 
I wonder why this doesn't have more reviews. This deserves more, I think.
"The Sound"... wow. The title's minimalism already makes it look interesting, but it doesn't stop at that. And I don't mean to exaggerate.
This, Liney, is beautiful.
I only have one nitpick:
- That should be 'awakened'.
Anyway, keep in mind the other reviews.
The idea, in general, is unique and interesting. This is pretty uncommon, probably because this kind of works is too general, and the hugeness scares some writers, if you get what I mean. When you write something as general as this, you have to keep an open mind, like what Hannah said in her review, so that you wouldn't miss out on anything you could have added, or you could have put instead of another. Going deeper, no real emotional attachment is formed and the imageries here are not that deep.
I think that when a literary piece taps the emotions of the reader, it partly succeeds as literature.
Overall, it is the idea of this piece which makes it beautiful.
I have no other things to say.
Now, most of the intention behind this piece is good. I'd like to say there's a favorite sound for everyone in the world, and though sound is not as connected to emotion as smell is, we still have those moments when a sound can make us thrill like nothing else. I know I love hearing my boyfriend's voice out in the hallway at work almost more than when he's right next to me.
But the problem is that your tellings of these sounds do not actually mention these sounds, but leave them vaguely named as sounds except for maybe the one about the girlfriend. This would have more of an anchor if you were to evoke these sounds perfectly and let us live a little while in the favorite sounds of other characters so we can see examples as a way to help us find our own. With many examples, we might be able to remember something that resonates in our life, a similarity, that cues us to choose and carry our favorite sound inspired by this piece. But because there's no specificity, it doesn't nothing of the sort.
Furthermore, that paragraph about the "overworked adult" makes it seem like the only sounds that exist of worth are music, when the creaking of a cabin screen door, bare feet shuffling over dirty concrete, or the repeated click of a mouse might be the sound for someone, and you shouldn't close your mind to that unless there's a very specific reason you wanted to focus only on music. Then why use "sound" and not "melody" or "chord"?
Anyway, keep working and writing. Push further. Good luck.
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Hey there it's Lycando here to review!
Well first off, I like this story. The sound..interesting. It's really a unique way of telling a story, based on one subject, the Sound. You give various examples of what the sound is to each person. At first I had the notion that the sound was the literal meaning of a sound. From the mother's point of view, the sound was her child crying. For the girlfriend the sound was the heartbeat.
It's a good story altogether, and don't mind me for saying this, but I feel that this would be much better off as a poem. Let me explain, you use much imagery in this. Something that good poems are made up of. Now I'm not saying you can't make this into short story, but it just fits better, and probably will sound wonderful as a poem.
Other than that, if you really want me to critique it as a story. I would say this. The sound seems to be less of an actual sound, and more of a feeling. Even though the sound is meant to be an actual sound, your description stirs up emotions. Given that, it would be better if the "s" in sound was capitalized. It draws more attention to it as the main subject.
Now for the nitpicking!
"To the confused teenager"
Confused isn't exactly the world I would use, maybe troubled? That's what most people say, the troubled teen.
"The sound acts as a break from reality."
Reality doesn't seem to fit well here, maybe "The sound soothes the pressure faced"?
Overall a really well done story. As I said above, you could consider turning this into a poem, I have a feeling it will do very well as one!
Cheers, Lycando!