Dellyween

by Lightswitch

Published October 20, 2026

18+ Violence

In Lightswitch_Flash fiction

Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for violence.

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Footsteps. Colin’s voice. He was the only one who hadn’t been caught, still wandering outside and calling for us.

Don’t come in, I urged him in my thoughts, eyes trained on the door ajar, but not daring to glimpse the creature above the door frame. Beyond this room and many corridors away must be a lamp, for dying beams of it clawed its way just outside. Lying on my side, I could see it, but I couldn’t reach it. It was where Colin was. His silhouette appeared a second after the muffled sound of his bare foot stepping on the carpet.

The room was devoured by darkness, but Colin sensed people, or whom were once so. Oblivious to his fate, he strode in. A step. Another step. He was rooted at the doorway, still trying to figure out what had changed in his bedroom.

‘Guys! This is not funny. Turn the lights back on.’ He demanded, only his last syllable flailed as he stumbled on someone’s leg that was contorted and twisted like a candy cane. It was something he never got to know, for a heartbeat later the door behind him slammed shut and the creature, extending its human arms, ate him. No! Tears brimmed in my eyes.

No one would give it a second look if it were on the streets, properly dressed like a gentleman---until it cranked its jaws open. The bottom jaw angled a few inches below its chin, stretching the muscles on his face. For the briefest moment, there was a glimpse of its true monstrosity as its eyes lit up with malicious joy, and its mouth poured a waterfall of rotten saliva. Then it would be done. It rearranged its features into a gentle smile, its skin reversing the red streaks until they were smooth like glass.

But not now. After a few humans in, it realised no one was watching and the dead teenagers wouldn’t resurrect. I wanted to vomit. Facing my direction, it savoured the sharp edges of the bones that stuck out, slurping greedily on the carpet for blood that soaked.

My heart thrashed around in my ribcage as I watched silently, between curled fingers which belonged to the body stacked above me. I was past the deluded stage of calling the party over. This was real. And if I wanted to see my family again, I needed to make a run.

The creature was bent down, still eating. But I knew it would soon be done, so I summoned any loyal strength that was left and shifted my weight towards the window behind. I pushed myself sideways with my shoulders until the person above slid down and took my place. I saw her face, lips slanted and eyes hollow. Maisie. Not you too.

I scrambled on all fours, around mountains of bodies. Silently. Swiftly. It seemed more people than us seven. A finger here, a shoe there. I sharpened my hearing; it was almost finished. I had faith to see my parents again, my brother who was too young to join our game and probably being tucked to bed now, he’d miss me.

When I was a breath away from the windowsill I drew to my full height, ready to vault into whatever bush awaited. One glass pane away was a foggy night, so misty even the candle lights were held captive inside their pumpkins. Not a twinkle in the sky, not a stranger on the streets. Two roads away was the rooftop of my house. I leaped.

Something’s wrong.

There was a cold hand around my ankle, tight and insistent. I couldn’t see the rest of their body. Are they alive? A flame of hope lit up inside me, ‘Come.’ I whispered, ‘We can make it.’ Whoever they were I’d be glad to save. We’d go home together and promise to never play on a Halloween night.

Hesitantly, he softened his grip and turned to face the creature, ‘Delly,’ his tone was harsh and irritated, like a knife piercing through the dead silence.

Lance? I recognised that voice.

 ‘You missed one here.’ He spat.

Delly was light on his feet, his steps deliberate and slow, weaving his way around bodies, yet somehow in a blink of an eye, I could feel his breath on my neck. Two against one. I was cornered and they knew they’ve won.

‘Help!’ I screamed, squeezing my eyes shut.

Fortune Dragons came rushing in the window I opened. A blue, majestic creature emerged behind, caging Delly and Lance within a steel bar. The roof busted open, and the two cages skyrocketed as if pulled by an invisible string, followed by the dragon. The tiles rearranged and healed themselves.

‘Delly was a human mutant; he didn’t want to deal you any harm.’

Fairies came, planting kisses on the bodies so that they became human once more. Gone were the blood, stains and pain. The lights came on, warm and bright.

Fog lifted to show the unlikely northern lights in the skyline and Santa, along with his deer soared through the sky—a test run in late October. The trail of sparkles entailed became constellations in the clear night sky, emblazoning the cool round orb that embraced November’s winds.

When I opened my eyes, we all woke up from a terrible dream, and continued the party with autumn cookies, silly jokes and hugs.

Everyone remembered that an accident happened, but no one remembered the pain, grue, Delly or fear.

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creeperfeverdreams wrote a review Review · 10h ago

Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the wretched S’more?

Top Graham Cracker - The main character’s party turns sour when a monster called Delly and his friend Lance come along and kill everyone there. But hope comes when dragons and fairies kill them and bring everyone back to life, without the memory of what happened earlier!

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I have no recommendations to make as of right now, but if you would like to edit this, you may.

Chocolate Bar - I like the gruesome way in which Delly is described. The jaw opening with the blood everywhere is insanely creepy, as is the part about the narrator having to move bodies off of them in order to run away. The sense of rot is strong and the fairies and dragons coming to save the day add a charming touch of eccentricity.

Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, a strange and spookifying story that is perfect for the Halloween season! I have enjoyed reading this and I will be certain to read other stories from you. In the meantime…

I wish you a glorious day/night! ^v^

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carapleo wrote a review Review · 11h ago

I think this excerpt creates a strong atmosphere of suspense and dread, particularly through the narrator’s helplessness as Colin unknowingly approaches the creature. I was immediately drawn into the scene, and I found the contrast between the creature’s gentlemanly appearance and its hidden monstrosity especially effective. The description of its jaw stretching beneath its chin was unsettling, and I think the idea of something so horrifying disguising itself as an ordinary person has great potential. However, I found some sentences confusing or overly descriptive, which occasionally weakened the tension. For example, the creature eating Colin happens so quickly that I struggled to visualize the action and fully absorb its impact. I also felt that certain phrases, such as “a waterfall of rotten saliva,” were slightly exaggerated compared with the otherwise claustrophobic atmosphere. I would have liked a smoother transition between Colin’s death and the description of the creature, perhaps by keeping the focus more closely on what the narrator can actually see. Overall, I think the excerpt has a compelling premise and memorable imagery, but I would refine the pacing and word choices to make the suspense more consistent. I believe the horror would be even more effective if I were left to imagine some of the creature’s terrifying details rather than having them explicitly described. I would aim for subtle, unnatural behavior instead of bananas-level exaggeration, because I think the creature’s almost-human appearance is what makes it genuinely frightening. Keep writing!!

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Liv22 wrote a review Review · 12h ago

Woahhhhh this is super creepy. You are weirdly good at writing monsters, that thing is SCARY. I'll be honest you lost me a bit with the dragons, was it all a dream? Is that what was happening? You're amazing at creating an atmosphere, I could see it playing out as you described it.
A few minor things;
'Dying beams of it clawed its way just outside' - gorgeous personification but it doesn't read quite right, where are the beams crawling too? Also I think the beams are plural so maybe 'their' way instead of 'its'? This is a super creepy predatory image but it loses some of it's power just because it doesn't read perfectly.
'Whom were once so' - eeeeek this is SO GOOD it literally gave me shivers. I did have to go back and read it again though, is there a way to say it differently? There's nothing actually wrong with it, and don't you dare delete it, but maybe it could be reworded?
'Like a candy cane' - ouch. Sounds painful. Again this is incredibly powerful!
'Slurping greedily on the carpet for blood that soaked' - again, TERRIFYING. Maybe it could be reworded slightly? Where is the blood soaking? Could it be instead slurping greedily on the blood-soaked carpet?
'Make a run' - a run for it?
The bit about there seeming more people than were actually there is amazing, I adore that line it's so creepy and conveys the sense and level of horror. Brilliant.
The whole first bit is amazing, there are a few tense problems because most of it is in past but then 'something's wrong'?

I'm not going to attempt to critique the second part because I don't really understand but it's REALLY AMAZING this whole thing - super creative and definitely terrifying. It reminds me of Halloween, the first one, where that girl is watching through the slats of the wardrobe. You've captured a really gory yet still tense and atmospheric horror genre here, well done!

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Lightswitch commented Comment · Yesterday

Sorry I had to resolve it with fairies and dragons... I keep loosing sleep. Did we notice when it turned happy?



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