This story packs a lot of action and quite a bit of meaning within such a small word count!
I won't go into corrections/grammar/anything like that since others have already left reviews of that nature, so I'll share my own opinion that you did a good job of capturing my attention with a story that is equal parts meaningful and adventurous. I particularly like little paragraph -- "Jack wiped the tears he hadn't noticed in his eyes" stood out a lot to me; I feel like in just a few words here, you've encompassed the fact that Jack is still plagued by the loss of his wife even when he's convinced himself that it's in the past.
Great short story all in all!
Points: 9075
Reviews: 111
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