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StoneSkin - Chapter 1: Who I Once Was

by Ley


Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for violence and mature content.

The Temple of Athena was my home, a place where I felt a deep connection to my roots. The marble columns and statues of the goddess, with her stern but benevolent gaze, watched over me most days. My duties were simple yet profound; tending to the sacred flame, offering prayers, and maintaining the purity of the temple. I found peace and quiet in my routines; I believed that my devotion would protect me from the world’s cruel, harsh demeanor.

But, alas, beauty is a dangerous gift. It attracts not only admiration but also envy and desire. My life changed the day Poseidon, the god of the sea, set his eyes upon me. He was a force of nature, his presence commanding and his desires relentless. He saw me as a prize to be claimed, and in his arrogance, he believed that no mortal or god could refuse him. That night still flashed in my head even after I got cursed, and it often makes me reflect on whether or not I deserved such an evil bearing.

The air was thick with the scent of salt and the sound of crashing waves, a warning of his approach. I was alone, tending to the sacred flame, when I felt a sudden chill. I turned, and there he was, his eyes dark and intense, filled with an emotion I couldn’t quite name.

“Medusa,” he said, his voice like the rumble of distant thunder, “You are as beautiful as the legends say.”

I bowed my head, feeling a mixture of fear and awe, “Lord Poseidon. This temple is sacred to Athena. We honor your presence. Welcome.”

His lips curled into a sinister grin, “I am here for you, actually. Your beauty has captivated me, and I desire you.”

Panic surged through me, “This is a place of worship, my lord. I am a priestess of Athena, sworn to her service.”

His smile faded, “You cannot deny a god. Your vows mean nothing to me.”

Before I could react, he closed the distance between us, his hands gripping my shoulders with a strength that left no room for struggle. The sacred flame flickered wildly, casting shadows that seemed to dance maliciously. My pleas for mercy went unheard as he claimed me, his power overwhelming and inescapable.

When It was over, I laid on the cold marble floor, my body bruised. The temple, once a place of refuge, felt like a prison. I called out to Athena, praying for her intervention, for justice against the gods who violated her sanctuary and her servant.

Athena appeared before me, her aura radiant with divine light. I thought she had come to save me, to punish Poseidon for his wrongdoing. But her eyes, usually filled with wisdom, were now cold and unyielding.

"Medusa," she said, her voice devoid of compassion, "You have defiled my temple with your actions. For this, you must be punished."

I couldn't believe what I was hearing.

"My goddess, it was not my choice! Poseidon—"

She raised a hand, silencing me, "Enough. Your beauty, which you so cherished, has brought ruin upon this sacred place. From this day forward, it shall be a curse. Anyone who looks upon you will turn to stone."

Tears streamed down my face as her words sank in, "Please, Athena, have mercy. I am your servant. I did nothing wrong."

But there was no mercy in her gaze, "You are no longer my priestess. Leave this temple and never return."

With a wave of her hand, she transformed me. My hair twisted into curling serpents, their hisses filling the air. My eyes, once admired for their beauty, now held a deadly power. I was thrown out, condemned to live in isolation on the island of Sarpedon.

“So… that’s what happened?” Thalia was lounging close to me in my lair, her back pushed against a stone boulder that partially blocked the entrance.

“Yes,” I hummed, staring at the fire in the middle of us. In the flames, I could’ve sworn I saw my past self, dancing and celebrating my goddess with joy and abundance. But as the flames flickered, all I saw was pain, and the crackling of the driftwood as it burned signified the end to those happy times.

Thalia’s face was full of thought as her eyes reflected the flickering light of the fire. She was quiet for a moment, absorbing everything, “Athena’s reaction seems unjust,” she finally said, “you were a victim. Yet, you were punished for something beyond your control.”

I nodded, the familiar ache of betrayal tightening in my chest, “Yes. The gods are not always just, Thalia. Their actions are often driven by pride, jealousy, and a desire to maintain their own power. They rarely consider the suffering they inflict among mortals.”

Thalia shifted closer. Her presence was oddly comforting in the loneliness that had defined my life for so long. It felt good to talk to someone. To meet someone who’d listen, for a change. Thalia tapped her knee in angst, “What happened after you were exiled? How did you come to accept your fate here on Sarpedon?”

I smiled weakly, and took a deep breath, “At first, I fought against it. I was filled with rage and sadness, cursing the gods and my fate. I wandered the island, screaming at the sea, hoping Poseidon would hear me and at least feel a little bit of regret for what he’d done to me. But he never did. Nobody came.”

The fire crackled between us, and I felt a tear run down my cheek. I quickly wiped it away as I continued, “Eventually, I realized that my anger would just ruin me. It wouldn’t change anything. I had to learn to live with my curse, to find some comfort in my solitude. The island became my prison, but also my sanctuary. The statues… they’re my only company.”

Thalia’s hand found mine again, her touch bringing me back to the present, “You are stronger than you realize, Medusa. To survive such torment and still hold onto your humanity is something not even Athena herself could do.”

I looked into her eyes, even though I knew she couldn’t see me, “Perhaps. But strength born of suffering is a bitter gift. I have lived for centuries, Thalia, watching as the world changes while I remain the same, trapped in my own personal hell.”

She squeezed my hand, “Your story is not over, Medusa. You have endured much, but there is still a chance for redemption. Let me help you. Together, we can find a way to break this curse.”

“Do you truly believe that, Thalia? That there is a way to undo what the gods have done?” I asked, raising an eyebrow.

She nodded, determined, “I do. The gods may be powerful, but they are not indestructible. There must be a way to fix this, to restore what was taken from you. And I will stand by you.”

For the first time in centuries, I felt a flicker of hope. Thalia’s presence, her unwavering belief in my redemption, was like a lifeline pulling me from the depths, “Thank you, Thalia. Perhaps, together, we can rewrite my story, and yours.”

"Perhaps," Thalia's voice drifted off. 

As the night went on and the fire dwindled, we continued to talk, our voices mingling with the sound of the waves crashing against the cliffs. In Thalia, I found not just a companion, but a reminder that even in the darkest of times, there’s always a chance for redemption. I was going to reclaim the truth of who I once was. 


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Sat Sep 28, 2024 10:28 pm
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Hi there Ley~
Took me awhile but I enjoyed this chapter as much as the prologue! This series is starting off as engaging and entertaining, I’m so looking forward to the next piece!^^ Now, without further ado, let’s get into the review shall we?


Firstly, I love how you kept the detail in Medusa’s thoughts and flashbacks but I would have loved to see maybe a wider use of vocabulary? More interesting and interactive words to make the reader wonder deeply what you meant or learn new unique words?? ~^^~
I loved the depiction you had on Medusa’s actual feelings and racing thoughts as Poseidon wronged her or as Athena failed to grasp the urgency of the situation and as she was in turn “exiled”. Thalia seems like a great addition to the story, I love how gentle and thoughtful she is portrayed as.

“ She squeezed my hand “


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“ “So… that’s what happened?” Thalia was lounging close to me in my lair, her back pushed against a stone boulder that partially blocked the entrance. “


She seems slightly indifferent when this first statement is shown after Medusa’s flashback ends, it might be just my weird interpretation but she seems rather emotionless and rather suspicious actually, as this wouldn’t be what I would expect as a reaction to such a heart-wrenching tale. Is it just me?
She might have been in thought or just contemplating what to say etc but personally I would have liked a more, let’s say interesting reaction!




On the other hand, I love the way Thalia contemplated Medusa’s unfair treatment and decided to give her hope, something Medusa hadn’t felt in decades. Thalia and Medusa are an unlikely pair yet there’s something about them which makes me excited to see what they produce. Also, Thalia has this mysterious aura around hee which makes her seem like she’s not exactly ordinary. Once again, might just be me haha.


Other than that, I love this chapter and I can’t wait to read more!! Have a good day and thanks for your time!!<3333




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Wed Aug 07, 2024 1:14 am
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Hello there my name is Stickles of the ST Brand Story/Book/Poem Review company or better unknown as STBPR. Today i am here to review (Ley) your story titled (Stoneskin Ch1).

To start lets discuss your writing technique. Nothing has changed, you have again done a excellent job in describing the situation, you didn't go into unneeded detail for newer areas because of already explained locations but didn't undermine what happened to medusa that day.

Next we need to review the story as a whole. As a person who strangely likes to read twisted story's (such as Jhon hunts doll house or The silence of the lambs) You did a fantastic job describing what happened to medusa without detailing it to much. A lot of writers even professionals over describe which makes the reader wonder if they should quickly switch tabs while reading (if you dont mind the joke)

Almost done cause next we have to look into the dreadfully boring grammar and spelling (not that I know how to spel).Nothing wrong except for the over usage of commas and periods which is common but remember if you wanna get a point across or add a type of air to instead space it out physically instead of using commas to much.

Finally I wanna talk from the heart and tell you what I as a reader think is great and what needs to be worked on. This final part is more my opinion than actually anything so dont worry your pretty smart head. You suprised me, its rare for a prolouge into a ch1 work so well but yours impressed me, although i wished for more deeper meanings with such a medieval setting but you will possibly tackle that in later chapters.

Your final score is /20
Writing 5/5
Story 5/5
Spell/Grammer 3/5
Personal 4/5
Grand total 17/20

Oh and a great bonus with being Reviewed by STBPR you get a audio book of your story free. It will be posted on (08/30/2024) via this link located here.
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Have fun writing. -Stickles




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Hi Ley! I’m here to leave another review.

<333 This was a very much a hard chapter to write, but it is also important, and you did a great job of it. You should really be proud of yourself for being able to write about such a hard topic and still be able to make it meaningful and write it well.

So let’s start from the beginning! I loved how you described the Temple of Athena and what Medusa’s life was like when she was a priestess. It seemed so blissful yet honoring, and I think this was a great setup to show that she truly had a great life before it all went downhill and she was outcast.

Then the note about beauty. I also thought this was great preparation for the memory scene, as it made the reader think about something they might not always consider. It was also good to introduce Poseidon and how he acted and thought of himself. It explained why he did what he did but also explained that it was cruel and should not be sympathized with.

And the memory itself! I was curious as to how you were going to write the scene itself, because I’ve heard of the story before. I think you did a great job of writing it in a way that was vague but also was focusing on Medusa’s perspective of it.

I liked how began the scene, how Medusa could sense Poseidon’s presence as he entered the room. Then when he talked to her, he was sort of gradually building up to that point, and trying to talk calmly but he secretly had evil intentions. Then how you described what happened leading up to the thing itself was clearly showing that Poseidon was cruel and took no heed of her not wanting to. It shows that it was never Medusa's fault that she was cursed, and she could do nothing to stop it. Then how you described Athena speaking showed that she did not listen to Medusa at all and immediately punished and blamed her with no sympathy or caring for her at that moment.

Now about the fire metaphor! Okay, I've got to say, the fire being connected to the two scenes is actually genius and an amazing connection. The fact that the fire represents the memory of what happened (at least, that's how I interpret it) is very clever, and it is a great touch to this chapter and makes it even more great and meaningful. As how I interpret it, maybe it represents her anger against the gods and how they betrayed her and did not help her when she needed it most, and that is really something you should pride yourself for because that is like, mastery! Anyways. Back to the story.

So Thalia and Medusa's conversation! I thought it was interesting reading about how Medusa's life had become since then. How at first, she was angry at the gods for a long time, but she soon came to accept her fate and lived alone pondering her life, with the sea and the statues as her companion. How Thalia spoke to her was also written really well because you can tell how she talks that she truly wants to help Medusa and she cares about her, which is probably something that Medusa has not felt in a long time. The readers finish his chapter with a sense of hope for her and Thalia and getting rid of her curse.

I don't have any critique coming from me! I couldn't really think of anything because this chapter was so well written. It was an even more enjoyable read than the last, and brought out a lot of emotion.

Keep writing!
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Hello!
The story of Medusa has been told for a very, very long time, and it has many parts that differ from one retelling to the next. In some, Athena did this to punish Medusa, in others it was to protect her. One thing I love about myths is that you can use whichever retelling you want, and tell them in your own way, just like you did here. You're adding to it, which is something I love to see!!!
My favorite part is probably the flashback that tells how this happened to Medusa. It describes everything in a way that I understood, even without explicitly saying what happened. This can be pretty difficult to do as well as you did. Great job!
Your dialogue is impressive, and I love the use of descriptive dialogue tags. They show what happens while the person says it, instead of just an "I say", "you say" kind of thing. My favorite one is probably "I looked into her eyes, even though I knew she couldn’t see me..." because not only tells us that Medusa is saying something and what she does as she says it, but also gives us the peace of information of Thalia not being able to see. I think that was extremely clever, and the more I think about it, the more I love it!
Let's look at the first line. "The Temple of Athena was my home, a place where I felt a deep connection to my roots." I love that it uses past tense to emphasize that this happened previously. I know that that is standad practice in most cases, but I am appreciative of it every time I see it. I love that it describes the temple as being more than just a home. This sentence makes me extremely happy!!! (I also love the ending paragraph <3 <3 <3)
I couldn't find anything I didn't like, or anything that didn't make sense. I have no criticism or complaints, even itty bitty ones that don't really matter. This is one of my favorite things I've read this month, and will probably stay pretty high on the list.
It's an amazing retelling of Medusa's story, and I can't wait to see more!
Have an amazing day/night!





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