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Hello there,
So, thank you for including the warning because i am someone who is very careful with SH or similar related stuff. Major kudos on that because it's rare.
I have to say this, when i first glanced through this i thought it would romanticize suicide, which I don't think it did that much. I'd still watch out for anything like that because that can be bothering. Again, the warning helped big time.
Yes! I can imagine that in detail, so good job.
I also think that you did well on making it feel so real. It is hard to read, i'll admit it's sad because it is all too common. It was casual, which is fitting for how it's on the topic of death and morbid things.
And one more line I liked,
'Lost love' is perfect for this I think. It's almost true too.
Have a good day,
Haley.