Published October 31, 2007
Face to face,
I fell apart,
As vowels go,
I said a lot,
Don't you let,
Those lights go low,
I don't think I,
Can stay,
Can handle,
Can stand the show.
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this is awesome, but i to would remove the commas, it would read easier.
keep going,
kim
Powerful message, but the commas are disruptive.
GReat contact with your emotion.