You know, looking back on that day now, I realize how stupid my parents and I were. I'm serious! My parents were stupid for sending their blind (blind!) daughter off with three total strangers, and I was stupid for letting them. Forget the fact that I took those self defense classes and take a refresher course every couple of months, two of my companions were male, and could squash me in a second. Me and my blind karate wouldn't have stood a chance even if they weren't mutants.
But, naturally, like the idiot I am, I attacked them anyway. Not right away, however. I let one of them take my arm and we got halfway down the street before I tripped her-I think it was a her-with my cane. I thanked whatever god that was listening at the time that I had done gymnastics before I started dancing as I dove into a round-off and flew over someones head. He-I knew it was a he-yelped in surprise as my foot clipped him lightly. I landed neatly on my feet, silently grateful the saying applied to humans with the name as well. Slipping the strap from my wrist, I positioned my cane like a sword, ready to hit any of them who dared approach me.
“We are not going to harm you, child. I swear it.” an accented female voice reached my ears. “Now, perhaps we can introduce ourselves, as we have not yet done so. My name is Ororo Munroe, but you may call me Storm.”
There were some small shuffling noises before someone else spoke up. “Wolverine. And look, while I love a good fight, I don't feel like hittin' a kid. Why don't you just come along, and like Ro said...” the gruff male seemed to be steeling himself for something. “We'll....talk.” It clearly pained him to say it.
“I hardly feel inclined to lower my defenses when there is still clearly one of you I do not know. Furthermore, Mr. Wolverine, while you may not feel like, “hittin' a kid,” I assure you I have no such qualms against a man who is clearly only a few inches taller then me. I'm not even pushing five feet.”
Someone, a very tall someone, standing next to me let out a boisterous laugh. “I like you, little one. I am Piotr Rasputin. Because you Americans find Russian hard to pronounce, you may call me Peter.”
I smirked. “Дурак kозёл. Моя бабушка является русский язык. У меня не будет никаких проблем, объявляя свое имя, сельский парень.”
Silence. Temporary silence, but silence nonetheless.
“Прошу прощения, немного один. Я понятия не имел, о которой вы говорили на родном языке.”
“Hey!” Wolverine called out. “You mind telling us what this babble is all about.”
“The child has informed me that she will have no trouble pronouncing my name as her grandmother is Russian and she knows the language. She also called me a stupid goat, and a farm boy. I believe that both were meant as insults even though the latter is quite true. I apologized to her.”
“Excuse me!” I shrieked, lowering my cane. My arms were wearing out. “Look, I get why you call me 'little one'. It's a way to tease me about the fact that I'm quite clearly vertically challenged. But stop calling me 'kid' and 'child'. Both names are demeaning to a person of my intellect.”
“Very well Katherine.” Storm spoke softly, “Perhaps we should continue this talk in the malt shop your father mentioned? I promise you, once again, that we will not hurt you.”
“Mmmhmm. That's what the voice in my head said too. But seeing what they say about people who hear voices, I'm inclined not to believe it.”
“Look kid,” Wolverine said. Really?!? I heard a striking sound, and soon realized he had lit a cigar. I choked on the smell, confused as to how I couldn't scent it before. “the way I see it you got no options. We outnumber you, and truth is you wouldn't even be able to make a move before we caught you.”
“So says the chain smoker who probably needs a new lung.” I snapped. “Here's how I see it, kid. I grew up here. I know these roads like the back of my hand, and I've never even seen it. You don't know a thing about this neighborhood or the people in it. But they know me. All I have to do is scream, and I'm sure the lovely widow Jenkins who lives in the house across from us will call thepolice.” my voice grew colder as I went on, “I don't need to make a move. I've already got you in checkmate.” I couldn't help but smirk at his lack of response.
“You play the game of chess, little one?” The Russian had spoken. If he was anything like the athletes I've heard about, I'm sunk. Oh well. In for a penny, in for a pound.
“I don't just play. I win.”
“Look, my child,” Storm spoke again, “I swear that we will not harm you.”
“And what good is that to me? That is all you have said since you brought me out here, but I am no less closer to listening. I don't know you, your word is nothing to me.”
“We're makin' a scene, Ro. Petey, grab the kid and let's get out of here.”
“Logan! He will do no such thing. Do you want to frighten the child more?”
“No, but I do want to get off the street and away from the eyes of the peeping toms.”
“Logan, surely there is a better way.”
“Hey!” I finally yelled, tired of their debate. “I'm right here. How's about talking to me instead of around me? I can't focus with all of you yapping like that!” surprisingly, they all shut up. Well, not that surprisingly. I do have a voice after all. To be honest, I was sick of this, and the more we dallied here the more it became likely that the Professor guy was hurting Carmen and Teresa. New plan. Not that I had a plan before. Go with it until you have a chance to escape, then run like hell to get home.
“I'll go with you.”
“You will?” Surprise coated Piotr's tone.
“No, I just said that to make you think I was going with you.” I spit out sarcastically. “I said I would, didn't I? A Pryde never goes back on her word. Now come on, before all the idiots currently spying on us get the notion that you have less than honorable intentions and decide to call the cops just because they can.”
Personally, I didn't care if they followed me or not. I had cash in my hand and the malt shop in my mind. I have a very short attention span most of the time, and it decided to kick in just now. Turning my back on them and walking away was pretty stupid, but I needed some serious chocolate and sugar to deal with the mess I was currently in.
It really wasn't that far, and we arrived there in no time. One of the men (it had to be Piotr due to the lack of smoke smell) darted in front of me to open the door, and nearly knocked me over. He began to apologize profusely, and continued to do so even after we entered the small building.
Mike's Malts had been in this neighborhood for as long as I could remember. Mike had long since become too old to run the place, and left the management to his two children. James and Jan had watched me grow up, and by now knew all of my moods and preferences. I listened to the bell jingle as we opened and closed the door, and knew it wouldn't be long before one of them greeted me. I was right.
“Kitty! It's so good to see you.” James reached down to give me a small hug. “Let me guess,” he said, pulling back and studying my face. “From the looks of it you'll be wanting the chocolate deluxe.” I smirked wryly.
“It's just been one of those days. But yeah, a CD sounds amazing...And, uh, whatever they want.” I added, gesturing over my shoulder to my companions.
“Oh?” he asked. “And who are these fine young people?”
Young. Ha. I bet Logan is nearly twice your age, buddy.
“Some teachers and a student from a school that's interested in my body. The Headmaster is currently with my parents, signing papers and deciding which of the science departments get my brain.” I said with a laugh.
“Excuse me,” the Russian cut in sharply. “He is doing nothing of the short, and it is an insult-”
“Can it!” I exclaim. “I was being sarcastic. Seriously, you speak English so well but you can't get a joke? What's wrong with you?”
Shaking my head, I turn back to James. Can you believe these people? My face reads. “Look.” I add softly. “Get what you want. I'm going to go sit down.” James gently touches my arm, and I allow him to lead me to a nearby table.
“So,” he asks, “What's going on?”
“Nothing.” I am quick to reassure him. “Just Carmen and Teresa trying to get me to go to another private school. I should be annoyed at them, it's not their fault. They probably don't want to be here as much as I do.”
“Well, if you need anything, a quick getaway or a shotgun, let me know. I'll be behind the counter.”
I opened my mouth to ask him a question but he stopped me before I even drew breath. “Jan is taking their orders right now. They'll find you when they're done.”
“It's not going to be that hard. I'm only three tables away, they can probably hear everything we're saying.”
“Why are you wearing the glasses again? I thought you said you were done with them.”
His question startles me. I hadn't even realized that I was still wearing them. I thought I had taken them off after Ms. Frost had left. I guess I didn't. My blood red irises tend to freak people out, so most of the time I wear glasses over contacts, just in case. The vacant stare I give people is freaky enough without the added features.
But I had said I was done with them. I hated wearing them, while feeling like I had to hide myself to make other people comfortable. But I guess old habits are hard to break. I waved at James as he walked back to the front counter, then jumped slightly when someone touched my arm.
“I did not meant to startle you, little one.” Piotr.
“It's alright. Just, next time, warn me that you're here first.” I said wryly.
“Da. I am also sorry, for not understanding your joke.”
“It's okay, I guess. Where are the others?”
“Storm is explaining to Logan that he is not supposed to scare you or endanger this mission in any way.”
I could hear them in the background arguing, but my focus was more on what Piotr had just said. “Mission? What mission?”
“блин.” he whispers after a moment in panic.
“Oh yeah. You are in so much trouble. What mission?”
“.....To recruit you.”
“I'm not going to your stupid school. Look, I'm sorry, I really am, but I'm happy here.”
“For sure. Your parents treat you like a baby and nobody really likes you. No friends, why, you do nothing but school and dance. Wanna try another lie, kid?”
Logan and Storm slid into the booth in front of me, and I felt it when Piotr sat next to me. I moved all the way to the left and still felt squished next to his frame. Dang, he's huge. I bet he could pick me up with one hand.
Scowling at the man who had just spoken to me,I asked the question again. “What mission?” My voice was hard, and I could tell from their silence that they knew I wanted the truth, the whole truth, and I wanted it now.
“Katherine, we know what happened today.” Storm said gently.
Crap. I decided to play dumb. “Oh, you mean Ms. Frost visiting? I think it's crazy that two schools come to visit me on the same day that....”
“That you fall through the floor.” Logan really is blunt.
Continue to play dumb, and maybe this will all go away. Yes, I'm that desperate. Got to get home ASAP.
“What on earth are you talking about? People can't fall through floors.” I paused. “Well, they can, but it would be very painful and no doubt involve a trip to the hospital and a morphine drip. As you can see, I'm fit as fiddle. Right as rain. There are so many analogies that I could use here, it's insane. But, the bottom line is that I couldn't have fallen through the floor and survived unless-”
“You are a mutant.”
I sighed. So much for playing dumb. “I know, Piotr.”
“Then why do you not admit it?”
“I'm fourteen. I'm a genius, and definitely more mature then the majority of people my age, but I'm still fourteen. I'm terrified. And, if I'm correct, I just admitted it.”
“When did you first know?” Storm asked, reaching across the table to lay a hand on my shoulder. Despite her intentions, it wasn't comforting.
“I've suspected for a while.” With my eyes it's impossible for me not to be a mutant. “But when I fell through the floor, or ceiling, I knew for sure. My brain is not normal. I would have finished highschool by age seven if my parents hadn't held me back. I have a buisness degree, and I'm working on getting a masters in computer science and engineering. Seriously, I go to school with people twice my age. Everything about that practically screams mutant.”
I wish a hole would just open beneath me and swallow me whole. This is so embarrassing.
“Katherine.” I returned my attention to Storm. “Have you ever heard of,” her voice grew quiet. “The X-Men?”
I laugh slightly. What an absurd question. “Of course.” A better question would be, “Who hasn't heard of the X-Men?” Seriously, they're on the news almost as much as the Avengers. And with Tony Stark, as a member, they're on the news a lot.
“We..They operate outside of New York city, as a school for, well, gifted individuals.”
I have no idea where she is going with this, but before I can interrupt she continues on.
“Within this school there is a device that was designed to locate mutants. It's still being built, so it doesn't work as well as it should. It can only cover one area at a time, and it is only able to detect a mutant when they use their powers.”
Yeah, still don't get it. Although I am wondering how the heck she knows this.
“I know for a fact that this machine was set off twice today when it was set to scan all of the northern states, from coast to coast.”
Okay, and this concerns me how? "Oh, wait....”
“Once when it located a mutant in New York City, and the second time was set off is when it found you.”
Woah. Major blonde moment here.
“You're the....” Someone's hand slaps over my mouth and I can't continue my sentence. I resist the urge to bite it. From the cigar smell, I know it's Logan.
“Yes, but keep it down will ya! Don't need the whole world knowing.”
I nod, smile, blink, anything to get this suffocating fixture off of my face. Noticing my distress, Piotr pushes me back slightly, and suddenly I can breathe again. “Logan,” I heard him say, “We are not here to kill the girl.”
“Oh please,” I gasp, “If anybody is dying here, it's going to be him. Jeez man, don't you know that smoking can kill you? You've lit up at least three cigars since you woke up this morning.”
Silence. Thank you, whatever deity that may or may not exist.
“...yes. How did you know?”
“The pack that I heard you pull out is a standard size, five pack. You clearly keep them in your back pocket, because you have a key chain on your belt that rattled when you walk, and again when you pulled out your pack. You may have only pulled it out once, but once was enough to hear that the contents moved so much that there were only a few left in it. I know you've smoked at least once today since there was ash on your hand that wasn't even slightly warm. There were other patches that were warmer, left behind by the one that you smoked not even fifteen minutes ago. That, and there was a stale undertone to the scent, which is rather overpowering. I have to admit that the number three was just pulled out of the air, but the facts are all there.”
“How did you get all that in the hour that you have known us?” Storm asked.
“I pay attention. I listen, I smell, I feel. And then, once I posses the facts, I deduce. It's all elementary really.”
“I like this one! She is good!” Piotr exclaimed with a laugh.
“I'm surprised you even understood half of what I said.” I snark under my breath. Logan jerks in his seat, and I realize that he must have heard me. I wonder if super hearing is the only power he possesses.
“Well kid,” he huffs, “You're right on one count and wrong on the other. I have smoked exactly three cigars since getting up this morning, but I will not die because of them. I've been smoking for over a hundred years kid, and I haven't died yet. The healing factor I have stops that from happening. Bit handy, actually.”
A healing factor? I think back to the days I used to run around the yard whenever Teresa's back was turned. The time that I fell out of the tree when I was nine. I had felt my arm snap, I screamed in pain, but by the time Teresa and Carmen arrived, nothing was wrong. Or when I slipped in the kitchen and stabbed myself with a butcher knife. Carmen found me covered in blood with no cut anywhere on me. The car crash I was in that killed my friend and her cousin. I escaped without a scratch. Every time I got hurt, the wound would be gone within seconds. I chalked it up to bad memory and dumb luck, but now I'm not so sure.
“Are you alright, Katherine?”
I smile slightly at hi concern. “I'm fine Piotr.” The truth is, I am far from fine. When I woke up this morning, it was just like any other day in my life. Going throughout the day listening to the whispered insults and slights that no one thinks I hear, but I do. Pretending to get a ride home with my 'friend', just so I can have a few moments without someone trying to take care of me when I clearly don't need it. Wishing my parents were different and didn't hover as much as they did, while being grateful for everything that they have given me.
But when I got up this morning and went to school, I didn't expect any of this. I didn't know I had a mutation, nor did I know that there was a way for people to track me when I used my powers. I wonder if such a device can be used for more...evil purposes. The thought sickens me.
The conversation continues, with Storm asking if I have any questions. Any? How bout a million woman, do you think you can handle that? But all I can manage is, “What happens to me now?” I can tell by their pause that they are all glancing at each other. “I can't see you, you'll have to use words.” I say, chastising them gently.
“You will of course come to our school. You have to learn to control your powers.” Storm says.
“And I couldn't learn to control them on my own? I have to attend your school, with no say in the matter?”
“Professor Xavier...”
“Is a telepath. He can't walk through walls. And even if he could, from my understanding of mutations, while some are similar, none are the same. There is absolutely nothing that any of you could possibly teach me.”
“Look kid,” Logan cut in, “While it's true that none of us can walk through walls, we are the closest thing you are going to get to decent instructors. We don't know anything about your mutation, but we are willing to learn, because we want you to be able to use it without hurting yourself or someone else.”
“Yes,” Storm added, “We have a special room that we train in, and our entire school is equipped to handle anything that you can throw at it. There, you don't have to worry about losing control.”
“Why are you so sure that I can't control it?”
“You fell through the floor an hour before we came, due to a very bad headache. What happens when you get one while holding onto someone? How will it affect them? Do you honestly want to have someone's blood on your hands?”
“Look mister, I....” I stopped suddenly, hands shaking and heart beating so loudly I'm sure that people in the next town could hear it. I was....tingling. There's no other way to describe it.I could feel my skin prickling all over my body, and I'm not sure exactly how I knew it, but something was terribly wrong.
The bell above the door jingled, and I jerked my head in the direction of the sound. Heavy footfalls, combined with a wide stride. Male? Hands slam on the counter, and James greets the newest customer. They respond, and my guess about his gender is confirmed. Judging from the sound of his footsteps, I can estimate the length of his stride. Using this, I quickly calculate his average height and weight. His footfalls are far to heavy for a 6'2, 175 pound male. He's carrying something very heavy. Something the approximate weight of a... “He's got a gun!” I scream, and all hell breaks loose.
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'I landed neatly on my feet, silently grateful the saying applied to humans with the name as well.' - I love this line!

'My name is Ororo Munroe, but you may call me Storm.' - I SO did not know that was Storm's name!
'I should be annoyed at them, it's not their fault. They probably don't want to be here as much as I do.' - I understand what you mean here but I had to read it three times. Just take out a few of the pronouns and put in some names and it'll make sense.
'I hated wearing them, while feeling like I had to hide myself to make other people comfortable.' - I don't think you need the 'while' there.
'Scowling at the man who had just spoken to me,I asked the question again.' - you missed out the space between the comma and 'I'.
'The pack that I heard you pull out is a standard size, five pack. You clearly keep them in your back pocket, because you have a key chain on your belt that rattled when you walk, and again when you pulled out your pack.' - She's Sherlock *flatfaces* gahhh
'I smile slightly at hi concern.' - I'm fairly certain this is a typo.
My only criticism, once again, is to be careful about tenses. I was surprised enough when you changed from present in chapter 1 to past in chapter 2 but most of the last paragraph was in present, as opposed to the rest of the chapter, in past.
I am getting so caught up in this and I never really get that interested in fanfiction so that shows how excited I am about this. Your characterisation is flawless and I could practically smell the scene.
Well done!
Hey boo!
Hold up, you never said who the companions were in the beginning chapter. I'd go back and add something in there, where Professor X introduces them to Kitty. Also, the comma after "male" isn't needed so get rid of it.
Blind isn't necessary, since we can see that she's blind. Change to >> my karate and I*
You know what to do.
My* should be capitalized.
Business*
Okay so one thing I forgot to mention earlier: why does Kitty call her parents by their first names? I mean, they adopted her as a child, so she grew up with them being the only parents she's had her entire life. Is there a reason why she calls them Carmen and Teresa and not Mom and Dad?
FINALLY. Piotr is here. <3 I adore him. Although I'm confused. Kitty is fourteen. How old does that make Piotr? If he's a teacher at the academy, then doesn't that make him too old to be her boyfriend, much less her husband and the father of her children? o_o
Kitty is a good character but she seems to ooze bitchiness (for a lack of a better word). Every comment is rude, mean, sarcastic, wryly, etc. I'm not sure how I feel about that. It makes her come off as a hostile character that is dislikable. I think she should tone it down a bit. Don't you think?
Her powers are incredible, however. Is she a super smart mutant? Or is it just one of those random high IQ coincidences? Either way, she's good. Now we shall see why this man has a gun and what he wants. I remember she gets kidnapped, right?
Also, I'm waiting for Kurt! Where is he?! D:
Off to read chapter three.
~Iggy
Whoa! This is a fantastic next part! All I could think when Logan put his hand over Kitty's mouth was, "No! Don't bite Wolverine's hand! It could make those claws come out!" (I may not be all that familiar with X-Men, but I've definitely heard of Wolverine.)
Keep up the great work - I can't wait for Chapter Three!
I kind of wanted her to bite him, but then I just figured that she couldn't breathe and was just focusing on the fact that she needed oxygen.
I'm hoping to have chapter two up by either Sunday, or Wednesday at the latest. I would finish it today or tomorrow, but I have a church conference that I have to go to, and I won't be able to have my computer with me.
Thanks!
Heya Knightteen
Definitely seeing how it is fanfiction at the moment. I like how this story is going. I really like your main character... she seems so observant because she has to rely on her other senses, as well as very down to earth. I think she is so realistic as well. You've done a spot on job there. I wasn't really sure why she needed to talk to that guy when she arrived at the shop. He seemed like a character that just came into the scene and then existed really quickly when the Russian arrived. Unless he's necessary or the scene is important in some way I missed out, please cut it. I mean, it wasn't really necessary. Looking forwards to seeing Kitty hit that special school and figure out what her own mutant power is...
Brilliant chapter ending by the way. I definitely want to turn the page and read some more, which is just how you want the reader. I love how Kitty deduces things as well, from the small details she picks up. I would've liked if you added that in a bit more throughout their conversations and happenings. Because you mention that someone tall when Piotr first shows up is there, but how exactly did she know? I don't mean the end scene by the way.
Also, even though she is blind, I would've liked a bit more description of the whole sweet shop? Kitty didn't even think about her parents when she heard about having to go to the school. Yes, maybe she has wanted to escape for quite a while now, but I would've expected her to wonder if this new-found freedom at the school would be quite as glamorous as she always thought.
Let me know when more is posted. I am thoroughly enjoying this, and you might just convince me to watch the latest Ex-men movies. (Somehow I always end up watching the films I'm reading a fanfiction of, if they're good enough)
Deanie x
She talked to James because 1) He owned the shop 2) He's her friend 3) I wanted to show how she interacts with others besides her parents and the team and 4) I totally forgot about the glasses in the last chapter and that seemed like the easiest way of dealing with it.
When I go through and edit it again, I may or may not cut the scene. I don't know.
I kind of think of Kitty as a miniature, female Sherlock Holmes. She can't see anything, so she relies on everything else to tell her what is around her. Based on stride, you can typically calculate average height. I believe that he also greeted her in the first chapter in narrative, and the location of his voice would have given her a good idea of where his head is.
That's just the way that I see it anyway.
To be honest, I'm not really sure how I feel about the X-Men movies. They have a good storyline, but they kind of butchered Kitty as a character. I like the movies as a whole, but I hate the way that they did Kitty. Different actors and small cameos in the first two, and a performance by Ellen Page that was very good, but they turned Kitty into a homewrecker by making her be an interest for Rogue's boyfriend. I still haven't forgiven fox for that.
And I will never forgive them for downplaying her role, yet again, in the newest movie they are making. I know that the movies vs. comics are totally different, but they ruined one of my favorite storylines. I suspect it will be a good movie, but I have to hate it for that reason.
Sorry. I'm just really mad at fox.
She doesn't really think of her parents because to her, as much as she loves them, they aren't going to make the choices for her. If she wants to go, she will go. If she doesn't, she will refuse. She cares about them, and always will, but she has always been different and feels that they will never understand that (and they won't). She knows the reason they are pushing so hard to get her out of the house (which will be revealed in future chapters) and she is upset with them because of that. At this point, she doesn't really care what they think because she feels that they will never really 'get' her in the way that she wants to be 'gotten'.
So yeah. That is my insanely long reply. I will keep you posted, naturally.
Timmy here for a review!!
You know, I am really liking this! Like, really. Your sentences flow so beautifully! And I absolutely adore your MC! To tell you the truth, I wasn't so sure about here at first. She seemed kinda like a crybaby in the first one, but this one? Karate Katherine! Yayay!!
So I will hit a few nitpicks straight off!
Ok, that sums up what I saw here! This was really good! Like I said before, I am loving your main character, and I love the path you are setting her on. And she isn't superpowerful either! Beautiful!
~Timmyjake
Your next to last comment, "She isn't superpowerful" will be contested in the future. Just saying.
Thanks!
You're welcome!
You'll just have to find out now, won't you? tee hee.
Awwwwww.... I want to know NOWWWWW!!!
No. I am the supreme ruler of this universe and I decide when you get to know what you know. And you only get to know it when I think you are ready to know it, and you won't know it a moment before!
Your brain wouldn't handle it if you knew it to soon.
*Sniffs imperiously*
Sure!!! Nope, you are wrong. I am far cooler than you. My red suit says so!
Tell that to my awesome boots and Harry Potter sweater!
Hmmph... Wellllll.... I have super-powers! Doesn't that count for anything?