Code switching is the act of changing the way you speak to certain people in a different way that you’d speak to other people. Some people think that code switching isn’t really necessary, but schools think otherwise. In fact, schools want their students to know how to code switch and more specifically when to code switch. Schools require students to code switch for a variety of reasons. However, I feel that the most important reason schools tell students to code switch is because of professionalism.
Professionalism is an important lesson that students need to learn. It is important for us, students to show profession because in the future this skill will come in handy for college interviews. Although some students argue that schools shouldn’t require students to code switch because they’ll want to figure it out in college, it is important to learn it before, so that during their interviews they sound educated and serious about their education. For example, “The concept of code switching was foreign to at least five of them and clearly, the thought of being obligated to speak in one manner with the people they love and are most comfortable with and another in front of a group of complete strangers—college administrators and educators, at that—never crossed their minds.”. This quote proves that students look uneducated when they don’t know how to code switch. This is why schools want students to know how to code switch, so that we don’t seem ignorant when we’re talking to what could be our future teachers in college. Another quote that proves this point really well is, “So Standard American English, or at least a wholehearted stab at it, was pulled out for job interviews, classroom discussions, speaking to and in front of White folks and other situations that called for “talking proper.””. This quote further proves how speaking in a professional manner will impact the jobs we get when we grow up. Therefore, I feel that profession is the main reason schools want students to practice code switching.
To conclude, code switching is required for students to learn in school because it makes us seem more professional. Code switching will also impact the future students have. Getting hired for jobs, or getting accepted to colleges are dependent on how educated you sound. Getting hired or accepted will rely on how you come off, even if it’s just the way you speak. Therefore, code switching is a good requirement that students need to learn in order to be successful in the their future.
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Hey there, I'mma review this like it's an essay for a teacher as well.
First paragraph, opening sentence: Your opening sentence lacks a hook, and you could put one in by commenting on why code switching is worth discussion, like, 'Schools require its students to practice code switching, which is...'.
First paragraph, thesis statement: You use "I feel that", which weakens your thesis statement, and 'because of professionalism' is vague, since what the professionalism is for is not stated. Perhaps, "Schools teach students the value of code switching so that they can conduct themselves professionally when [insert context(s) here, e.g. 'at the workplace' or whatever you desire to put here]".
Also, what sort of schools -- public or private? High schools, middle schools, colleges?
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Topic sentence (Professionalism is an important lesson that students need to learn): vague, needlessly repeats the intention of the thesis statement, gives no value to the paper or idea of what the following paragraph will contain. Because your paragraph continues on to talk about job interview performance, you easily can switch the topic sentence to "Professionalism is an important lesson for students who wish to conduct themselves well in a job interview."
"For example, “The concept of code switching was foreign to at least five of them..." - Where is this quote coming from? You need to source it, whether or not by saying, "Such and such said..." or by using a citation.
"Another quote that proves this point really well is, “So Standard American English..." - Again, cite the quote.
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This does a fine job of summarizing the essay before it and depending on the grade you're in it may be fine, if a little informal.
There are only 3 paragraphs in this essay, which is concerning, as I never was able to write an essay that was less than 5 paragraphs. Always I had to have at least 3 topic sentences and follow a strict structure so I'm worried that your essay is a little thin.
Maybe to beef it up you could have a paragraph about what sort of vocabulary/grammar/speech that students in the area you're talking about normally use and contrast it to what the desired diction is. For example, I personally got made fun of today for saying "I don't be like..." when I should have said something like "I never act like..." because that's the 'official' way to say it, and maybe you could point out what exact code switching you are talking about by pointing out some examples of what is the common way and what is the professional way.
You also could talk about where students get the mode of speaking they're used to from, and what influences determine what the "official" way English should be spoken is. In both cases, you could point out the media that students your age consume, compared to things like the news, the radio, movies, and so on.
hey restlessheart here, i am not sure what kind of review you want but I am going to assume this would be turned in to a teacher or something of that nature. First of all when writing an essay you want your opening paragraph to start out a little broader before narrowing down to your topic. Also using the pronoun "I" is not something you use unless it is an opinion essay. After you state,
with your conclusion paragraph do not forget to start specific and end broad. As always, keep writing 
"It is important for us, students..." there should be no comma there. additionally in these types of essays it is important to remain formal so using contractions is too casual. You might also want to watch out for too long of sentences, point of reference the one that begins with "Although". One more thing before i stop rambling on