Young Writers Society

Stopping by for a review.

I honestly think this has a good meaning but like others have said; it is difficult to read and interpret what you mean. I also dislike the fact that you didn't take it any further than that statement. You could have taken it a lot further such as adding an imaginative verse with nontraditional use of punctuation and capitalization to show how it works.

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This is my favorite poem

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Hi Nikayla just stopping by to review. So first of all this is a lovely piece of work and don't change a thing<3
Okay on with the review
I think the message is pretty misleading. Like since when don't we capitalize and punctuate our poetry to match up with standard English language rules? Whatever, I'd never just disregard capitalization or proper punctuation like ever in poetry so good luck in life. But that's just me. js.
-amelie.

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Heyo Nikayla, stopping by to review.

I think that this is a tragedy. I don't understand how you can disrespect the art form that is Poetry like this. Of course capitalization is actually a tool of meter, and your meter is all over the place. Despicable.

In all seriousness, I appreciate very much the point you are trying to make, but honestly it could be taken the opposite way. Because of the capitalization choice you made within the poem, it is actually difficult to read. Because it is difficult to read, that might actually support the view that capitalization should be standardized in poetry.

To remedy this situation, I might actually make different capitalization choices throughout the poem. For instance, you could have one line with no caps, one line with all caps, one line with every word capitalized, and so forth. I think that this would also further illustrate the amount of diverse things you can do with capitalization in poetry.

Also for sure capitalize one I and leave the other i. That'll get to 'em.

I hope that this review proves useful to you in your quest to Destroy the Haters (tm). Happy writing!

Yo Nikayla. It's been a hot minute.

I get your message, and I appreciate it, but there's a lot of unforgivable flow here that needs to be addressed before this really has any impact on the reader. Your line breaks are made as if to create symmetry instead of breathing flow. Your punctuation gives unnecessary linger and pause and hold, and I'm a bit disappointed in your lack of imagery or any motifs at all beyond your statement.

Because that's all you've given us: a statement. Certainly not your best work. What if you were to redraw this into a creative piece that utterly enveloped the reader and brought the point into their head organically? I believe that would be more effective; it's always worth an experiment--though in this case, I'd say it's more of a necessary operation.

I also apologize for the generic review, but you didn't leave author's notes and I wasn't sure what you were looking for. Maybe we can discuss this later in a poetry jam.

Hope this helps,
Ty

You succeeded in making this funny XD

this is sad. ee cummings would be disappointed.