Hi there! Here for quick review.
I really enjoyed reading your piece. I think you utilize creative word choice and original lines of thinking in many of these stanzas. However, there are a few areas in which I might change the syntax around a bit. Some of the lines bordered on being wordy or a bit awkward. Other than that, your grammar is overall good, as well as your word choice.
Structurally, this poem is pretty sound. It flows quite nicely and I don't see anything that really needs to be fixed with the structure.
Nice piece, and good job!
Happy writing,
Kali L.
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