Young Writers Society

Hello,

This is a really well-written poem! I like the central idea you portray here with such deep and expressive words. I think the title you chose fits in really well with conveying how our internal words carry so much more meaning than our external words... and you bring up this title again in the last line as a nice conclusion to tie everything together. I can feel a lot of emotion from each of these lines, and you made this idea pretty realistic with those questions to make me understand and relate to how I feel on the inside versus what I actually say. Overall, this is a really great poem with a clear idea.

I only saw a couple of typos in two lines.

"Boil, burn and tear at you until your on your knees" In this line, the first "your" should be "you're".

"The wounds they cause, to deep, for healing." In this line, the "to" should be "too".

Also, I would suggest using punctuation to enhance the flow of this poem by adding pauses for more effect when reading through each of the lines. You used some punctuation here and there, but I think there are a lot more periods or commas that you could add in.

Anyway, that's all from me. I hope to read more of your work!

Keep Writing

Katnes I like the big picture behind this poem. People masking their true pain and emotions with "noble speeches of valor" like you said. I also like the choice of words like burn, suffering, hurt, agony which transfer that heat of pain the individual is dealing with unto the reader.
I also wanted to point an error I noticed with "The wounds they cause, to deep, for healing." I think "to" should be "too" if the intent was to express the depth of the wounds.
Continue writing, you have beautiful themes that could be shared with the world and people dealing with such issues. Good job