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EllieMae
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Hey friend! Ellie here for a quick review. Since this piece is so short, I decided I would just type up a couple of thoughts for you! :D

I really like the format of using pictures with poetry. they say that a picture can capture 1000 words and I think this is definitely true as I looked at this literary piece. the poem states:

witness
the light soon
from the moon


i like the rhyming of the words soon and moon! this reminds me of when I was younger and i would take trips to canoe to this little island. we would sit on the beach and watch the sunset. we had to wait for the darkness until we could see the beautiful moon. we would sleep under the moonlight. it was a really beautiful experience!

in my interpretation, this poem seems to state that we may need to wait and endure hard things before we can receive our reward and the beauty associated with it.

my praises would be that you have a beautiful, open, format! i love the rhyme and the simplicity of it. i feel like this is something you could repeat in your mind as you watch the sky get dark :)

my recommendation for improvement would be to add more description and length! i would love to read more of what you write and create :D i really hope you can post more of it on YWS soon!!

have a lovely day, my friend!

sincerely,

ellie <33

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Cozmo2024
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Hi this is Cozmo here giving you a short and sweet review!
I was not expecting this format this is very cool! When I opened the poem I was like, "Wait a sec...? Is it glitching?" then I scrolled down and I was greeted with a lovely picture of the moon. I love this short and sweet few lines of the poem...about the moon! The title says it all and I love that. It sort of reminds me of how paintings have those sort of literal titles like "The Girl with the Pearl Earring." and boom there's the girl with the pearl earring right in the center. Did you make the moon image yourself? I thought it was really nice. One thing I will say is maybe fix up some of the formatting and grammar, unless that's the style that you're going for. It looks good either way.
- Goodbye fellow writer and have a lovely Christmas! :)
Love, Cozmo



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