Published February 20, 2011
*This was written a while ago, it's not that good. Also, I wasn't quite sure what section to put this in, so if it needs to be moved go ahead. (:
You gave me hope
You gave me faith
You took me home
You gave me strength
Like a bird in the sky
You raised me high
You gave me more
You let me soar
As the wounds began to heal
And the way you made me feel
I knew that this was true
All I wanted was you
Then it all changed
And my heart began to break
I was sick of your games
How much more could I take?
Crimson red tears
Flooded from my wrists
The pain of past years
Brought me to my wits
My wings became battered
I began to fall
You watched as I shattered
Too late to call
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This was so good !!
The rhyming didn't sound forced at all and the poem flowed really good (:
Good work !!
I really really liked it. Keep at it!!!
It makes me think of breakups. it was sad yet filled with love. In other words I LOVED IT.
I really like it..sounds like lyrics from a rap song..beautiful.
100 points (I give this many points because it's really good and I don't know the maximum)
Maybe make it longer next time.
KEEP IT UP
--kyle
well....this is a very deep poem....the kind i LOVE to read...it is really very nice...keep up your works...