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To Dance (Currently Being Redone)

by Kaedee


Not currently here...'To Dance' is being fixed! As some have said, I am trying to make it less clichey (if that's even a word!) and more personal. Will upload here when finished. Thanks!

~Kaedee :)

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Wed Feb 10, 2010 5:44 pm
okkervilpuddle wrote a review...



This was a cute piece, but to make it better I think you should put more detail into it (you can still keep the style you've chosen). As you have it now it borders on cliche. Ok, more than borders. You need to take this away from the standard "this is her outlet/passion" piece and make it more personal by adding your own touches. But I do like the new style, even though I'm not sure I know what your normal one is like. ( http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EHL1X0jV0dI ) (if that's allowed, haha).





Very well; I hear; I admit, but I have a voice too, and for good or evil mine is the speech that cannot be silenced.
— Joseph Conrad, Heart of Darkness