To Dance (Currently Being Redone)

by Kaedee

  • Short Story

Published February 10, 2010

Not currently here...'To Dance' is being fixed! As some have said, I am trying to make it less clichey (if that's even a word!) and more personal. Will upload here when finished. Thanks!

~Kaedee :)

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okkervilpuddle
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okkervilpuddle wrote a review Review · Feb 10, 2010

This was a cute piece, but to make it better I think you should put more detail into it (you can still keep the style you've chosen). As you have it now it borders on cliche. Ok, more than borders. You need to take this away from the standard "this is her outlet/passion" piece and make it more personal by adding your own touches. But I do like the new style, even though I'm not sure I know what your normal one is like. ( http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EHL1X0jV0dI ) (if that's allowed, haha).



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