Hi, J here for a review.
First of for your first poem this wasn't dreadful, it just took you a few lines to get a rhyming scheme going. I will say that once you did get some kind of flow going you stuck to it and didn't let it get out of hand. I couldn't find too many grammar mistakes so great job with that. Your flow was interupted as the poem went on because of forced rhyming just kinda let it flow when you are writing because to the untrained ear it sounds like you aren't trying when really you just forced rhyme.
You did a good job figuring out the Publishing Center in your very first poem. I could understand your format and it even got easier to follow as the piece went on.
I loved your Wonderland theme and I feel like you put a nice play on the all to common imagery.
Over all good poem keep writing more. Once you write a few you start to create your own style and things get easier
Good Job and Keep Writing!!
Points: 5229
Reviews: 80
Donate