Hi Jericho, Felistia here with a review for you on this wonderful review day.
Quick note: Sorry for the unforgivable lateness.
Story: The story is starting to pick up a bit and is starting to get interesting. I like that you decided to introduce some more characters. I still don't really have much to say about the plot since I am still waiting for it to unfold.
Characters: The old characters are starting to take on some new light to them and are starting to become more interesting. You got the emotions across quite well in this chapter. I still feel like you should be including some more information on the main character's back stories because I feel that it would help me connect with them better. I really like the new character Cat. You described how he looked very well and so now he has a bit of a creepy side to him that I like.
Description: You also improved on the description in this chapter, though I think you could expand upon it. I really want to feel what the desert feels like. The harsh evening air, the dry dusty air and the clear starry skies.
Small mistakes: I couldn't find any mistakes in this chapter.
Overall another great chapter and I will be moving onto the next one right away. Never stop writing and I hope you have a great day\night.
Your friend, Felistia.
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