Hey! pretty girl
With the hazel eyes,
Please don’t you ever cry.
I know you’re scared,
I know you’re sad,
But everything will turn out alright.
Don’t hate your body,
Don’t hate your smile,
Know that you’re beautiful
Inside and out.
I know you’re hurt,
I know you’re mad,
But you deserve better
And that’s a fact.
So please don’t you cry
Over a broken heart,
A broken promise,
A stupid guy.
You can do better,
Aways know that.
And times heals everything,
Even the heart.
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This is a really cute poem, your rhythm and flow is almost impeccable in this piece
I liked it, it's definitely something anyone could read when they're having a bad day and smile. I like it personally because I have hazel eyes haha!
The only correction really have is your last two lines, they don't seem to flow as well. So maybe some words tweaking?
Otherwise I really liked it, keep it up!
Hey there -
All smiles when reading this one. It had a feel good essence to it, and I thought it was artfully clever.
Great repetition, and sweet messeges.
Keep it up!!!
-IamHathor22
This was beautiful and I loved it. I read it over several times I loved it so much. It was moving and I was able to understand your point without it being cliche or too hidden in metaphors. It is a good poem for a broken heart and made me smile after reading it. Great job. Five ours out of five.