Reflection

Hey!

I really like how this poem feels almost like the speaker is watching different versions of herself through a piece of glass. The glass works really well because there’s a sense of being able to see those emotions and memories clearly, but not actually being able to reach them anymore. The repeated line, “I can’t feel it / The emotion isn’t mine,” is probably my favorite part because it gets more unsettling each time it appears. At first, it sounds like emotional distance, but by the end it feels more like the speaker is looking at a past self who has become almost like a stranger.

I also liked the progression from the happy girl, to the angry girl, to the furious and betrayed girl. It gives the poem a sense of growing up and slowly losing something along the way. The repeated description of her as “gullible” and “immature” is interesting too, because it almost sounds like the present speaker judging her younger self.

One thing I would improve is the wording in a few places. Some lines, like “She missed / Missed on friends,” feel slightly awkward and could be rephrased to make the meaning clearer. There are also several places where the poem tells us the emotion directly (“She was angry,” “She was furious,” “She mourns”) instead of showing it through an image, action, or memory. Adding one or two specific details from those moments could make the different versions of the girl feel more real and distinct. I also think the final “Not anymore” is effective, but because it is so important, giving it a little more space or visual emphasis could make the ending hit harder.

Overall, the poem has a strong central idea: becoming so distant from your past self that even your own memories no longer feel like they belong to you. It’s simple, but there’s something quietly unsettling about it, and the repetition gives the whole poem a detached, almost dreamlike feeling.

I loved this poem<3

This is pretty heartbreaking. If I’m correct and I might not be, I interpreted this as the loss of innocence as you grow up, which may not be the actual meaning behind it, but even so I loved it. It’s very simply written and melancholic. I liked the metaphor of looking through the glass into the past as it’s accurate to the feeling of looking back.

I really like this poem because it feels realistic and like something many people can relate to.

So full of life
So... Different
I can't feel it
The emotion isn't mine

Missed on friends, who at that time, she thought she had

Then she was furious
At something else
At her friends
At everyone

I like this because you can kind of speculate about what might be going on, but you don't have a clear answer. And the speaker just being someone spectating this downwards spiral is sad because they saw when this girl was happy, but now seems them at their low spot. The shift from happy to anger to betrayal is something almost universal, but the speaker isn't actually experiencing these emotions. They only see the effects of the inner turmoil of the girl.

Hello! This poem seems very personal and self-reflection oriented.

The way that "I can't feel it / The emotion isn't mine" is used here really works because of how it creates a sense of detachment, even though the girl's emotions get more and more agonizing.

What I really like is the progression: Happy —> Angry —>Furious —> Hurt and Betrayed. It makes you feel as if you are looking into someone's life through photographs while the speaker watches from afar, never being part of any one of those versions of her.

The use of "Gullible" as a recurring descriptor is also something that interests me because its meaning changes as the girl grows up.

I think that the ending of "Not anymore" is the best part of this piece. In it, it changes the meaning of everything else. It makes it seem like maybe that emotional detachment which was there before isn't there anymore. Why did that change?

One thing that I could think about would be changing "She missed / Missed on friends". "She missed out on friends" would make grammatical sense but if that weird phrasing is intentional then it should stay.

In the end, I think that this piece is pretty good on its own because it leaves you wondering. Good luck with your future endeavors!

Namaste, this is shakthisinha..


I really liked this poem because it feels very personal and honest. At first, the girl is shown as happy, carefree, and full of life, even though she is described as gullible and immature. As the poem goes on, we see her growing up and slowly becoming more angry and hurt because of the things she experiences. I liked how the emotions change throughout the poem because it makes the reader feel like they are watching different stages of the same person’s life.

The line “I can’t feel it, the emotion isn’t mine” stood out to me the most. It gives the feeling that the person speaking is looking back at their younger self, but feels disconnected from who they used to be. The repetition of this line also makes the poem feel more emotional each time it appears.

I also liked how the poem doesn’t explain everything directly. We don’t know exactly what happened with her friends or what caused the betrayal, but we can still understand that she has been hurt and has changed because of it. The words “She trusted also She is gullible and She mourns” show how her trust, which might have once been something innocent, eventually became something that caused her pain.

The ending, especially “Not anymore,” is simple but effective. It makes me think that the speaker has changed so much that they can no longer relate to the girl they once were. Overall, I think the poem does a good job of showing growing up, losing innocence, and feeling disconnected from your past self. It has a sad feeling to it, but that’s also what makes it memorable.
Overall, I really enjoyed reading this poem. It has a lot of emotion behind it and I think the message comes across really well. The way it shows change, growing up, and slowly losing touch with your younger self makes it quite relatable. Keep writing and exploring these emotions because I’d love to read more of your work. All the best to u, and I hope you continue creating more beautiful poems....