Love Hurts

Thanks i'll try to do better. Haha we had to go through a poem unit in school and we had to like figure these really really REALLY hard poems and not a single person enjoyed it.

I don't know about the rest of the world, but I like poems that are short, sweet and to the point. Normally, when I read poems I'm spending 20 minuets just trying to figure out what it's saying. I enjoyed yours because I knew what it was saying. But, you can spice it up a little bit, by trying to use words other than mad or sad. It'll mean the same thing, but it will look more appealing to the reader. But, every girl has gone through a tough break-up, and reading this poem really screams "I know how you feel." Which, chances are, you do.

I know it was my first ill try to do better next time

Unfortunately, I know exactly how the narrator is feeling.

Anyway, there are a few things that I didn't really care for in this. The sentences seemed a bit awkward, as well as the rhyme scheme. The rhyme scheme seems to go off and on. Like, your first stanza, it's there. The second, it's not. The third, it's stretched. You need to keep a good rhythm, especially if you're going to rhyme.

Grammar mistake time!

and then I'm mad