Published March 15, 2011
Alright, i know this poem isn't the greatest ever written, but i consider it the first major poem i have ever wrote, i wrote it in 6th grade, and it won me first place in the 6th grade poetry contest, so it's my baby. Please help me make it better!
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It wasn't too painful to read but it was sad. I am not good on harsh reviews but it could do with more rhymes and more lines. I really like the rhythm in the words, its like a song in your head. And no wonder you won that contest in 6th grade I would have picked this one too.