Hi. It’s Morgan. Remember how I said that I couldn’t wait to see some of your work? Yeah well I was so happy when I found that this one was by you. So anyway, ready for the review?
First off, I think it was great. I adore Greek mythology. I remember reading Percy Jackson: Son of Neptune in like third grade. That was when I fell in love with Greek and Roman mythology and all of Rick Riordan’ books. They’re amazing, and I see that you’ve pulled off a great poem of the same myths. You started off with a great start and ended the poem pretty interesting. Plus, your vocabulary was outstanding. Good job!
Although, I would considering maybe putting in some punctuation just to organize the poem and maybe separating it into stanzas. If the poem is more of a story-type then the stanza part doens’t have to be necessary, but definitely put in some punctuation. That way the poem would flow more. If. you need help with the stanza part, just put in something that. would be the separation.
Sorry, bad explaining. Here’s an example...
the cat went to the store.
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Then it went home.
so you see the dots, right? Yeah, that’s how I do it. I mean, I know it may be weird, but hey, It works! So anyway, I really enjoyed the poem and I loved the idea of using myths. Good job and keep writing!
Points: 257
Reviews: 27
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