Fights and arguments scatter our life together
You say goodbye and I’ll walk out that door for good
So what’s left to fight for?
Tears flow down my face as you yell and scream
Your eyes widen as I say those hateful words
I scream lies at you through puffy eyes
We had the chance to drown our fears and start all over
But you’re way too deep to walk away
Tomorrows a new day, new promises will be made and then broken with lies
You’re consuming my mind, just stealing away my heart
Give me back my heart
Don’t look in my eyes seeing right through to my soul
Give me back my private thoughts
Memories of you control my mind, just fogging my brain
Give me back the control of my mind
Get out of my head
But its not over, it’ll never be over
You’re breaking all the walls I built
Its hard to say I love you
But then it just comes naturally
How did we get here?
Don’t walk away and leave for good
Take me with you
Its not over, it’ll never be over
My tears flow down in the mid of this storm
Just mixing with this rain of painful words
Why can’t this lightening shock our love back to the beginning?
I’m falling apart, we’re fading apart
I cry for you everyday
Hear my silent cries for help
Cause this break down is eating me alive
Just clawing at my soul
And burning away my heart
Do you feel me when I think of you every moment of my day?
I’m afraid you’ll just fade away
If this is a nightmare, I never want to wake up
I’m frozen with the pain that’s in my head
Its breaking my heart
I spent all my days trying to distract my mind
Cause when I think, I think of you
And when I’m thinking of you and I’m all alone
I feel the pain and its killing me slowly
You’re consuming my mind, just stealing away my heart
Give me back my heart
Don’t look in my eyes seeing right through to my soul
Give me back my private thoughts
Memories of you control my mind, just fogging my brain
Give me back the control of my mind
Get out of my head
But its not over, no it’ll never be over
You owe me forever
We belong together always
I’m not too blame this time
These words that flow out our mouths
Just tearing at our hearts
Losing ourselves in these fights
But its not over, no it’ll never be over
I rip out my hair, screaming to break the silence
You sit motionless, staring at the wall, tears streaming down your face
I’m tired of feeling so alone
I want to go back home into your arms
Just take me with you
Cause its not over, no it’ll never be over
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Good afternoon, Mystery! I'm Lumi and I'm here to give you some advice on this poem of yours.
First off, let me start by insisting upon one enormous thing: break this up into stanzas. As it is written, I see a wall of text that is unappealing and hard to read, which is a bad thing. If you take no more of my advice, adhere to that, please.
Secondly, I'd suggest that you use proper punctuation and capitalization in this poem, just as you would a piece of prose. From what you show here, I can see no mastery over the English language.
Other than those two things, I'm going to avoid doing a critique on this particular piece because it's not really my cup of tea. Shape it up, and you'll be on your way!
-Lumiface