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Emotions

by ImaginaryPoet


It's almost funny how fast

emotions can change.

From carefree to gentle,

like a mother finding a cut

on her child's knee.

From furious to apologetic,

like two people realizing their argument

isn't worth their friendship.

From respectful to horrified,

like a little girl learning a truth

about her most beloved idol.

From curious to shocked,

like a teenage boy learning the truth

to a question he's been asking for years.

From restrained to hysterical,

like a father who's found out his sister died

and is now alone for the first time all day.

From humorous to foreboding,

like your favorite book making a joke

at just the wrong time.

So yes, it's funny how fast

emotions can change,

but if you don't pay attention,

the person that belongs to them

may change as well.


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QueenMadrose wrote a review...



Hello!!!!

I hope you are having a great day/night!!!

rose here to leave a review. (It's been a long time since I wrote a review so bear with me)



Anyway, let us get to it!




I truly enjoyed reading your poem.
My favourite part is
"From furious to apologetic, like two people realizing their argument isn't worth their friendship".
I really like how you presented emotions in different examples. Like when you said,
"From carefree to gentle, like a mother find a cut".
I also really like the imagery that was used in this piece. One thing that I thought you can maybe change if you'll like was the part when you said
"to a question he's been asking for years"
I think that there needs to be a comma after question so it could flow better. so it would look like this

"to a question, he's been asking for years"

In my personal opinion, I think it will flow a lot better if you put a comma there.



The line where you go on and say "
From curious to shocked, like a teenage boy learning the truth to a question, he's been asking for years."
I was a little confused by this line.
What I mean by confused is more like I wanted to know what he had been asking for years or what was the thing he found out. That's all. Other than that I think you did very well with this. Good job! I like how you presented emotions in many different examples. I also like the flow you have going on with this piece. I never really had someone present emotions like this. It was always focused on one emotion. Most people write about whether it was happiness, sadness, etc.

Welp that's the end of the review. just a friend reminding these are all suggestions. have a great day/night bye!!!




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vampricone6783 wrote a review...



This poem was so cute! I like how the message leads to a point where one must be careful with someone so that they don’t let their emotions change them for worst. It all escalates when you get closer to the end.

The only thing I want to talk about is that you use the word “truth” twice.

Other than that, I’d say that this was a nice poem to read. Good job! I wish you a lovely day/night.





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