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Chapter Five: Seventeen Years Later
The old tree by Charicadd Town Junction had been dead for two years. For a while, Argo had attempted to revive it. Every day he would go there: he would trundle along a cart of manure and lay it at its roots; he would make the long trek to the old well and back to bring it water. But no matter what he tried, the tree remained grey, stiff and lifeless.
It had been that way since the day Morgan died. The night before, it had been green and flourishing, waving its thick foliage in the breeze. In the morning … all that was gone. It no longer seemed to laugh at Argo as he went past; no longer did it turn its leafy green arms to the morning sun. Argo had watched its demise in despair; in the absence of his wife, it had almost seemed the only thing worth living for. And now it was dead.
Argo still felt the loss of Morgan as a deep wound; the cold knife of Death had pierced him to the heart. He could not picture her face, or imagine her laugh, without aching terribly inside. There were times when he felt physically ill.
Argo had kept away from the town ever since that day. He had not shown his face in the square in broad daylight for two years – and when he did visit, he visited in the evening, when the stalls and shops were just starting to close, and kept his face hidden. He had not even visited his old friend, the baker. In fact, he was quite sure that not a soul in the town knew of the tragedy – not even of his child.
It was on one particular evening, in midsummer, after leaving home to buy the week’s supply of food, that Argo ran straight into the one person he had not expected to meet – Mr. Oldman, the baker. He certainly did look old, thought Argo, as the man picked himself up from the ground and began muttering profuse apologies.
Argo gave him a small smile and bent to pick up a parcel the baker had dropped. His hood slipped slightly as he straightened up.
Mr. Oldman took the object gratefully.
“Oh, thank you, sir … most kind …” It was at that point he looked up – straight into Argo’s eyes. He did not even notice when he dropped the parcel again.
“Dear Lord,” he muttered. “Oh, dear Lord …” After searching Argo’s face for a moment, he spoke again. “Argo?”
Argo stopped trying to conceal his face, hesitated, and then nodded.
“Yes – it is me.”
The old baker seemed lost for words.
“Dear Lord,” he said again. Then, “Argo … it really is – two years, Argo! Where were you? We thought you were – both of you –”
Argo managed a small smile.
“We – I – have been living in a house on Old Dirt Road – a short way down from Morgan’s old house.” His throat constricted painfully as he said the name.
Mr. Oldman looked about ready to hug Agro. Restraining himself with an effort, his face broke into an ear-to-ear beam.
“Why,” he said, “this is wonderful! The whole town must know! Argo, you have no idea how worried we all were –”
Argo stopped him in mid-sentence.
“I have no time to stop by for greetings, Master –’’
Mr. Oldman’s smile faltered, and then broke out again.
“Master! Yes, you were my assistant once, weren’t you? A fine mess you made of the job sometimes, too …” He grinned at some distant memory.
“Oh, yes! By the by, how is old Morgan getting along nowadays? Still climbing trees and jumping off roofs and whatnot, no doubt?” He chuckled.
Argo felt the line of his lips tighten.
“Morgan is dead,” he said shortly.
The smile on the old man’s face froze. As the full impact of what his former servant had said struck him, his eyes widened in horror.
“Morgan – dear little Morgan – surely not …”
“It’s true, Master. She – she died shortly after giving birth.”
Mr. Oldman’s eyes did not leave Argo’s face. His lip trembled involuntarily; his face blanched.
“Morgan … dear little Morgan,” he stammered again. “How – how awful …I would never have guessed it … oh, Argo, my boy, I’m so sorry …”
“It is not your fault,” choked Argo. “The time for mourning – is over. She died – two years ago.”
The baker shook his head slowly.
“Oh, dear Lord,” he breathed, yet again. He suddenly looked up, and fear was in his eyes. “But the child,” he stuttered, “surely the child lives?” He looked terrified to learn the answer.
“The child – the child is – alive,” faltered Argo, but Mr. Oldman had caught the hesitance in his voice, and studied his face carefully before speaking again.
“Argo,” he said hesitantly, “Argo, this must be devastating for you … I – I don’t know what to say …”
“You needn’t say anything,” said Argo shortly.
“Oh, come now, my boy … I want to help you. Come and stay with me, lad, or at least stay for supper – ’’
“No,” said Argo, so abruptly he knew he had sounded rude. “I am sorry, Master. I have things to do.”
“Argo – ’’
“There is nothing more to say.”
Mr Oldman looked most aggrieved.
“Well, then,” he said after a while, in a strained manner, “I suppose – we should say goodbye for the present?”
Argo nodded tensely and held out a spidery hand. The baker looked at it tremulously for a moment, and then pulled Argo into a tight embrace. He let go very quickly, but Argo acknowledged the action with a small smile.
Mr. Oldman watched Argo’s face intently.
“I had – I had best be off,” he said, and turned to walk away, but after a few paces, stopped and looked back. “And Argo,” he added, “I truly am – sorry.” He turned again and strode away, somewhat less briskly than before.
Argo arrived home very late that night. As he entered the little shack, a thin cry reached his ears. Laying his sack quietly upon the low table, he made his way down the hallway.
As he entered the room, he spied the little bundle of material lying motionless atop the little straw bed. Argo approached it and lifted it gently in his arms.
“Carla,” he murmured softly.
As his face hovered above the bundle, a tiny hand reached out, touching his long nose with soft fingers. Argo held his slender hand above the bundle. The tiny fingers roved around aimlessly for a moment, and then grasped his bony index finger tightly.
Argo freed his hand gently and pulled the blankets away from the child’s face, gazing sadly down at it.
Through the gloom, two milky-white eyes stared back at him.
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What?! You...murdered Morgan? Gasp!
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I have to say though, I was immensely surprised by this. I have to agree with borntobeawriter that I feel skipped out of a great story. Morgan's mom disappeared, there was the thing with the two strange men, the pirates and the smuggled alcahol, and other things...all these clues point to a story, and then..BAM, it's changed. This new section seems as if it could be the start to a whole new story, without connecting to anything in the first story. I'm sure it has some awesome connection and it's all clear in your head, but I'm really rather bewildered as to it all.
In the very first section, you mention that the tree's been dead since Morgan's death and that Argo has been trying to revive it, yet later you say that he never goes to town - where, I believe - the tree is. Then you say that he only goes at night if he does, so, does he bring water to the tree and mulch it at night? (Rather inconsequential, I know, but I have to be nitpicky since your writing is so good.)
When the baker meets Argo I am rather confused. It seems that they have had no connection with the town or people since they got married. Why didn't they stay more in touch with the town/people? How did Argo manage to keep the information of Morgan's death such a secret? Were Morgan and Argo really SO seclusive and secretive? The baker seems to have thought that Morgan and Argo were...dead? Also, Mr. Oldman speaks of the child as if he knew of her, or did he just find out when Argo said Morgan died in childbirth? (or shortly after, same difference
I guess what I'm trying to get at, is, I can understand why Argo doesn't really want to associate with people. He has a serious case of depression, blah blah blah. BUT, the baker seems out of touch so completely that it leaves me thinking that after they married, Argo and Morgan lived by themselves. Literally. No friends. Connections. Nothing. I don't know if what's bugging me makes sense to you, since at explanation, I am quite hopeless.
I am very anxious to find out where this all leads. You have a very complicated plot here to explain ALL the things - mysteries - you aroused in the first chapters, and also explain why Morgan died, about Carla who appears to be blind (am I right?) and what Argo does from now on. I really had a surprise here with this, and it seems an abrupt change from the previous chapters. You're reading along and PLOP suddenly everything changes and you're like 'Whaa?'
Well, I feel I gave a pretty crappy review, hope it helps some and definitely let me know when you post the next chapter.
Well there Ignis! I must say this was a surprise.

I thought it was Argo who was going to die! I'm almost relieved that it's Morgan - does that make sense?
I'm really confused now. Is this where the story ends? Is there more? This sounded pretty final but really nothing happened. We're full into the chapters and action, Morgan's mother has disappeared, her father also and suddenly, Bam! Her and Argo were married and she dies? Is it wrong that I feel cheated out of a good story?
I want mooooooooooooooore. Now. Seriously lol
But seriously? Is this where it ends? As usual, your writing style is brilliant and flawless. I just wish there was more...Is there?
Let me know, ok?
Tanya