Hiya Idrinkink, here to review
Although short, I think this piece has loads of true meaning to it and definitely leaves me thinking. You can tell there were a lot of strong emotions put into this piece, and I can really hear the voice speaking out. I also quite liked the style of which you wrote this- the pacing was good and it tells the 'story' well.
In terms of improvements, there were some things I noticed.
Being different was a gift and It meant that your soul was painted with the colors nobody had ever dreamed of and that was very rare but what troubled her was that nobody appreciated her, embraced her or kissed her once.
I think this sentence is waaay too long- read it aloud and you'll probably run out of breath because there aren't any pauses. Try and break it up with some commas, or connectives rather than just one big long sentence.
I agree with the others in saying the main issue with this is the topic of it and the fact it's such a widely talked about issue. That's not to say people aren't aloud to feel like this, however they probably don't all feel EXACTLY the same. I think you should try and put your own twist on this, if this is referring to someone in particular then you could use something personal to talk about. This will separate this piece from the rest of the talks about being 'different' and will mean that you've put your own spin on it, so it's more original.
Lastly, I'm not sure if this is much of an issue but I'd like to mention it. I'm not sure if you wanted this just to be in one block paragraph or not- I also don't know the context of this and whether it's part of a novel, a monologue or anything like that. But one thing I will say is that if you do split it up into separate paragraphs, that would dramatise more- having pauses usually leaves suspense and tension. Just a suggestion
To sum up, this was a very interesting piece which I could tell was well thought out. To make it more original, I suggest making it more personal by perhaps describing an anecdote or a back story to really build on this character and put her aside from the rest. I hope this reivew helped, PM me with questions or if you'd like another review!
Keep writing!
-Arc x
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