Published July 29, 2010
Bubbles floating down the street
make me stare and take a seat.
So crystal clear and oh so clean
more beauty than I've ever seen.
Bubbles, dancing like a child
living out a sweet young style.
Head up high in the clouds
looking careless, free, and proud.
Bubbles, more than meets the eye
rising high into the sky
And leaving always makes me cry
as I hide my envy for a goodbye.
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this is so adorable, i really like it.
it all rhymes really well and it's very creative.
just the way you said everything, i could feel the bubbles popping on my arm as i sat on the sidewalk.
great job
~Adeera
Hey there! This was quite the nice little poem! Very enjoyable to read. I gave me a bubbly feeling in side haha. But really, I like what you have here, keep up the good work because I have nothing bad to say about this! Hope to read some more of your stuff soon XD
This is really good bud! I get the feeling i'm a child looking out innocently towards the sky and all of a sudden beautiful bubbles appear out of nowhere The only thing I thought was a bit off was the last line because it didn't quite flow with the second to last line in the way it was off beat a little bit but it's always hard to rhyme an ending and not make it sound ridiculous! I liked it a lot man, especially the idea of it all, very original.