This was a good poem, solidly written, and yes it DOES suck when a character or element of the story doesn't quite mesh together...much like this poem doesn't quite work for me. For starters, I know that comedy is subjective and can be hard to explain, but I still don't understand WHY he doesn't work (plenty of books and TV have that one funny character who works just fine) or WHY he isn't funny. You need to explain, not just give an example I think, because giving examples to show how awesome the other characters were, didn't convince me they were so great. (In fact, one sounded like a character in a few episodes of Xena: Warrior Princess, a show which blends action and comedy really well.) Maybe if I knew the book you were talking about and had read it, the additional context would help me like this poem more, because you certainly have the poetic chops: I just think perhaps this topic needs more fleshing out, and is more suitable as the subject of an essay.
Points: 148
Reviews: 45
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