Published March 29, 2011
Why is there so much suffering in
this wretched world? there's too
much pain going around and man
causes all the problems.. regardless
of what they do or say doesn't make any
sense at all and promises are
never fulfilled..
Man doesn't have the capacity
to bring peace to the world because
they always make a mess of things and that
causes both nations to come against each other
like dogs fighting over a bowl of food. War is
the only thing man cares about; war tanks destroy homes
and takes a life after another. children suffering from
hunger and illnesses that cannot be cured. God cannot be
blamed for everything going on in this planet ; in other words,
he's not the cause of all the suffering, but he allows it. There's
a main difference of him causing the pain or allowing it, but
he must not be seeing as the bad god; he love's us so much that
he gave his only son for us to be forgiven, but not everyone
appreciates what he's done.
God will have his revenge and will wipe every tear from our eyes;
He will also eliminate all the wrong- doing and the suffering will be no
more. Wars of the past will not be brought in and death will no longer exist.
God's son is our pass over to the new world , but in order to be accepted,
we gotta set aside our remorse and have eternal faith in god that we'll soon
be free from these chains that holds us prisoners against our will. satan and
his demons do all they can to stop us from serving god knowing they've got
a short period of time.
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oh thanks I'll try to fix it up.. although not now lol. Im glad you liked it and I hope everyone reads it so they'll get the idea of whose causing all the problems and why does god allow it to happen.
First of all, I love this. It sums up a lot of the questions people have about suffering. Lots of people I know come up to me and ask, how can God be a loving God, when there's people dying in Africa, starving, and he does nothing about it? I think they need to read your poem!
(You don't need the dots, you can just have a comma in between problems and regardless. You also only need a period after fulfilled.)Now onto the critique:
Capitalize the H every time you say him, and are talking about the Holy God.
Capitalize the G.....since we are talking about the Holy God.
There are also some capitalization errors in this. ..... Children needs to be capitalized.
When you say, from these chains that holds us prisoners...it should be just hold.
Capitalize the S in Satin, since it's the beginning of a sentence.
A comma would be great between ....wrong-doing, and the suffering.......
The rest looks really good! Thanks; it was a joy to read!
I absoloutely LOVE this! this is so true in every where in the bible it clearly states the heart of man is full of putrid and vile things and no good cometh out of it...I believe that is the reason for there being so much evil in the world. I cant wait till his return to the world. Just think when Jesus walked the earth he restored, healed, rebuked, brought peace, and showed an endless love...and we werent around to experience it but this time hopefully we will be able to experience the Peace of God and the Love of Christ! Love your writing its so true and passionate with emotion