Hiya Harry, I'm finally here, following through on the review I promised in that first comment! xD And ooh, we get to see things from Serafina's perspective now? 0.0 Nice!
It was a little surprising and amusing to see how Serafina views Safi as a potential threat... although that is reasonable, considering the area they work in. (You never know who might be a double agent. >.>) I also appreciated being able to see more of this building!
So, on to some specifics...
When You Get a Notification from That One App You Forgot Was There
Okay, so first off, I know I said this already, but I absolutely love this title. xD It's giving me Rick Riordan vibes. =P
For someone who always looked like he was about to sit down and have a cup of tea while reading a book of poetry, he could walk with quite a bit of purpose.
That "always" kind of makes it seem like Sera's known Ray for a while, but I'm assuming that character information is just from whatever she's picked up in the little time she's known him...
In fact, the lighter oddly seemed to get darker and darker the deeper in they went.
I'm wondering whether this information will be relevant later. >.> Perhaps there's a certain ability that has to do with blue light? Or does the hallway transform somehow, and that's why there aren't any pieces of art on the walls??
Ray popped open a door, thankfully this one opening with the handle like any normal door should and gestured for them to follow.
Great callback to the "interview." xD
This girl really could be a terror if she wanted to.
Hmm, so Sera can be a little awkward too... xD And I find it rather hilarious that Sera thinks sweet, fluffy Safi could be a terror, lol. (Unless this version of Safi has some tricks hidden up her sleeve? 0.0)
The resulting smile surely didn’t need to be as large as it was. She’d just held a door open for like half a second, not saved her life. Doing her best to tear her eyes away from those blues eyes that somehow reminded her of a soft summer sky and a storm at the same time, Serafina turned towards Ray.
I really like this paragraph! The first sentence establishes how much Safi seems to appreciate the gesture without directly saying it. And the description of Safi's eyes is beautiful. <3 (Do I sense a possible crush in the future?? >.>)
“Welcome to the situation room,” said Ray. “And before you say it, yes, we all know it’s a bit of a lazy name, but its direct so it works.
Are... are we supposed to know what a situation room is? If I had to take a guess, I'd say it's like mission control or something? Or like the main room the agents work in? But I'm not sure.
Of course, I say team, but really there’s just two more people here.
Ooh, new characters? :3 Can't wait to meet them!
Thanks for the great chapter, and I hope you have a fantastic day/night! =D
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