I really love these two poems and the way they convey so much feeling in such a short space!
I felt that the comparison between the sky and the sea in "kites" was especially beautiful because of how opposite these two elements usually are. The last line "if only their tails weren't with me" really stuck out to me because of its contrast with the impression of freedom that's created in the previous lines.
I love the metaphor you used in "starry Nights". It's so unique and it beautifully conveys the image of the night sky. The use of the words "sugary" and "milky" adds some sort of familiarity to the image you're 'painting' and a lot of depth to the poem.
These poems are so magically written and i really love the emotion you've added to the descriptions. While I'd love for them to be a bit longer, I think you have conveyed your message effectively to readers and created a lasting impact.
this is my first review so I'm still mastering the art of writing one... I hope it helped..
Points: 30
Reviews: 8
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