Young Writers Society

It seems like here, you just wanted to fill space until you could advertise your YouTube channel. In other words, you're trolling. Which is cool, because trolling is fun every once and a while, but I'd like to see something serious from you.

But since it's an advertisement, I'll review the advertisement and tell you that this doesn't do much to make me want to check out your channel. The beginning is amusing, but you don't actually say what it's about. What am I going to get from watching one of your videos? If you're going to advertise, try to make what you're advertising seem like something I really want, whether it's a video, YouTube channel, product, or otherwise. Without actually addressing your product and what it's about, the advertisement itself becomes a waste of time for everyone involved.

Anyway, my advice: Find a better way to advertise your channel. This is a really small website, and you're not going to find anyone who is interested in it. People who read stories to review are often really busy and don't have that much time for things like this. If you're interested in sharing actual stories, which I doubt, I hope you do. Otherwise, you're best taking your advertising elsewhere

Hello! Ripple again.

This piece has a fairly unique format, so I am not completely sure what type of piece you were intending to write. You intentionally contradict yourself often, further confusing the matter. Yes, contradictions can be used for effect, but in this scenario, it just doesn't make sense. The steadily increasing indents remind me of poetry more than anything, and the title reinforces that notion, but the extremely casual and nonchalant tone contradicts that. You break the fourth wall, as far as YWS is concerned, so it can't be intended for any other readers, which really limits your audience.

I noticed a few typos, namely

Jon era gumps is superior to Dan era.

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