All Anastasia wanted to do was to become Queen. She wanted to be able to wear a crown and walk up to people without them hating on her or beating her. That's all she every wanted, but she knows she will not be able to get that on the terms she lives on. She lives with a very abusive mother and a father who will do anything to make her mother be happy, even if means hurting Anastasia. Anastasia gets a chance to be free from all of this. Gets a chance to get away from her father, mother, and don't forget her bullies. Will Anastasia take this opportunity of a lifetime or will she stay with the people who don't even care about her? Read to find out her choice and her story after she choices what she wants.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Okay...well this does sound like a bit of a description for a story, but it was pretty interesting, so here I am dropping in to put my two cents on this thing here. Now, at first glance, this appears to be focused on this Anastasia here...and it appears its here having to make some sort of life changing choice and then the story will be the consequences of said choice.
Now getting right to the content itself, the premise mentioned at the start is a tiny bit strange....I don't know how one would go from being bullied right the way to just queen, it is a little unclear if its perhaps some person's dream, or if this is some member of an actual royal family, or if there's something else involved. I just feel like it is just a little bit of a strange way to put that sort of thing there.
The next part however is definitely intriguing, it sounds like a pretty difficult household situation to have to grow up and I think that could certainly make for a very interesting backstory to this character as the story itself develops. At any rate, this one sounds like something I would probably read. There's just a couple of things here that I found a tiny bit off.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
I really like it! I can't wait to read the rest, remember how stories are separated though, beginning, middle, and the twist!
Greetings H3AL1NGW1NGS and welcome to The Young Writer's Society! I'm sure you'll love this site
My name is Authorian and I'm here to review your summary here~~
As Wolfie said, if you ever publish a novel, something like this would be pasted on the back cover. It's good that you're practicing summaries and the like.
It sounds like this'll be a good read. I'll try and come back to read chapter one.
Best regards,
Authorian
Greetings, W1ngs! Wolfie here to give you a quick review on a quick work.
It seems to me like this is your little pitch about your novel, which is great. It's good that you're able to summarize the plot of your book - picking out the important parts and touching upon some foreshadowing - and write it in a quick paragraph. Most likely, if you ever finish this book, you'll have a paragraph similar to this pasted on the back cover.
For some writers, it's impossible to summarize their works in the fashion that you've just done. As for me, I hate it when someone asks me, "What's your book about?" I don't know! Well, I do know, of course; I just don't know how to pick out the main points and quickly display them before them in an attractive way that would promote my novel. Looks like you, W1ngs, already have your work cut our for you!
Let's get nitpicky here and analyze some little things~
Queen of what? It'd be nice to know the setting of the book. What time does it take place? Are we on Earth, or some other fantastical land?
The answer seems kinda obvious to me. Why would Anastasia stay at all? There seems to be nothing going for her. After all, the title you've chosen for the book is "Dreams Do Come True," and at least to me that's a sure bet that she's going to somehow become Queen. So, to me, I don't like this sentence at all, and your pitch would probably do best without any cliche-esque rhetorical questions. Instead of focusing on whether or not Anastasia will leave her family (since the answer is obvious), focus on something else. Some other pivotal moment. I can see that you've selected Romance as one of your book's genres, so perhaps you could foreshadow her meeting of the prince, or whomever it may be. Maybe she has to choose from several differect suitors.
I'd remove this sentence entirely. It's also much too cliche.
Overall, I like this. It might seem too much like any old fairy tale, but I trust that you can take it upon yourself to make it as fresh and unique as you can. Best of luck on your writing!