This is Gem climbing out of her fairy garden for a review!
This is an interesting poem and I am fond of it. I like the tone of the poem, it isn't sad so much as this interesting melancholy flavor. Your word choice is intrigueing and refreshing. Words like 'Machiavellian' put beside words like 'Sanguine'. I like it, it is just enough different to make this an interesting read. I am not seeing any issues grammatical or otherwise. As long as the feeling your poem gave was the feeling it was intended to then it is fine. It gave this melancholy feel as I discussed before, like this person has detached himself from a pain that would otherwise be throbbing. Like they've tried to leave behind a part of himself. Is this what you were going for? if so you are in the clear. >.O As I said I loved it! I hope this review is helpful, but I really don't have any criticism for you. <3
This is Gem skipping on to the next. Keep writing, and using such fun words!
Points: 33
Reviews: 105
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