Published October 31, 2007
A gentle whisper,
Could shatter this cold
And frozen heart;
My tears create the blizzard,
But you are my shield.
You melt me away.
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Indeed short and sweet and expressive!
That is so sweet.
This is definitely the cutest poem I've read. Gives a new perspective too snowdrops.
How you could bring such a true yet wonderous message in so few lines amazez me.
I really liked the sound of it. It flowed very well, and felt melodic. It sounds like you could do an awesome Haiku!
This is very nice it's like part of a song i'll listen to over and over again.
im not sure how i feel about this, i like the imagry, but love poems tend to have an air of sappiness, and im afraid this is a tad sappy.
you melt me away seems to be overused.idk, i like the winter love analogy, but this seems just too sappy, keep trying tho, this can be very good.
Very nice!
Pretty, but perhaps a little too ambiguous?
I don't know. I really liked how it sounded, but because I'm dumb with poetry, I'd say to be clearer about what you mean. So thickheads like me can enjoy it as well.
Aww that's a bit sad. Amibigious, but heartfelt sorrow of unknown love finding its way into a frozen heart. Good use of words to show that whoever this is about has been hurt before and through that sadness closed off the door to his or her heart for fear of being hurt once again. Then out of no where we have the one who protects them from themselves and changes everything. Even throwing in a bit of innuendo while doing so makes it a really interesting poem.
Simple, but so deep. Loved it.
wow.....im not sure how to describe my feelings now.... wow