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Heyy Kayla here!!
Welp this deffiantly cought my attention. I really want to read more. I liked how the characters thought on there own. I like the details and thoughts put into this. The long monolouge, of course broken by thoughts was cool. I this so far, I can'tr really find anything to fix, it's pretty good, and I can't wait to read more!
--Kayla!!!
Hi Gheala.
I think with this version, you gave your characters even more depth and texture. I felt for them both, once again.
This version is definitely better and I can't really think of any criticisms to make.
I do have a question though... How much percent of the novel would you say is completed?
a bit of a random question, but I just wanted to know, haha.
really not much of a review, I know. Most of what I have to say went into your first draft, the only difference is, is that this one's better