Published September 26, 2008
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Hmmm....
I suppose I didn't exactly understand some parts of it.
For example:
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Are you asking yourself these questions? Or the reader? And what is the point of these questions? It seems like you are unsure as to how you should describe something...
Maybe I am just to stupid to understand it but...fact of the matter is I don't...
But over all its a good piece. Well written, no mistakes that I could see.
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I liked it, i think i liked it more than your other poem but i wasnt too sure about the first paragraph... the brackets just didnt seem to fit, and i dont think it flowed that well, it was more like sentences put into poem order but them still sounding like sentences, i just thought it didnt flow as well as the last one. but i loved the rest of it, i loved your descriptions