Published August 11, 2009
Ever since I saw you I can't look away
Growing closer to you every passing day
So many words I want to say
But do you feel the same way?
I don't know what I'm going through
The days I've known you are so few
Yet it feels like I've always loved you
Do you love me too?
My heart is empty, covered in frostbite
Your face is the shining light
Its a gift from god to just be in your sight
Just talking to you takes all my might
I want you to love me!
So many things I want you to see!
Imagine all that we can be!
I'll do Whatever it Takes, whatever it takes for you to love me
I have nothing, no one
So many awful things I've done
What in the world have I become?
But you make me want to live, have fun
I don't mean anything to you
With my life I have nothing to do
But somehow I will make it though
I just hope you'll feel like this too
I want you to love me!
So many things I want you to see!
Imagine all that we can be!
I'll do Whatever it Takes, whatever it takes for you to love me
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Hello!
I like this lyric. This song will be actual for many persons. Many persons know, how it feels, when you love somebody, and you don't know, what person, loved by you, thinks about you. I think, that song will be good. It is interesting to listen to this song.
So, I wish you success in writing.
The piece said so many things, and I liked it, but I think it could have some tiny things that could be changed.
I think that if the boy feels something for her, why not tell her? I think it's about letting everything out to find out if the other person feels the same way, not about locking every up and waiting for the person to make the first move.
Here is pretty much the same. But now that I think of it... in a song it wouldn't look bad. Actually, if the song's slow, it may sound good.
I really don't think its necessary to rhyme everything. In songs, that's something that composers don't really think of, much. So, not everything is got to rhyme.
In the refrain: the song's title doesn't have to be in capital letters, keep that in mind.
The have fun part it's the only thing that breaks the bubble, for me.
Um, maybe some of the words can be replaced by more emotional ones. In some parts, I got lost, but I hope it gets better.
The same as the other chorus. No need of capital letters to the song's title.
OK, so this was my first review, and I hope I had done you some good. I am no expert, but those were things that I found that didn't go well with the rest.
Also, don't think I didn't liked it... because I did liked it...
Take care,