They know not of my age
nor do they care
the influence of despoliation induces hatred
my criminal ravishment
permeates through me
feelings profound
shadows flaunt freedom
my hysteria is nauseating
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Gabrielle,
The only thing nauseating is this stanza. It does not work as a stand-alone nor will it work in conjunction with anything else.
Get rid of it.
Best,
Brad