I like this poem. It has a very good theme, and I really enjoyed reading it. It's mostly grammar errors I'll point out real quick.
First, "Yes people may write to make their voices heard" Should be "Yes, people may write to make their voices heard"
Also, "And sorry to say, you won't be spared" Should probably be, "I'm sorry to say, you won't be spared"
And finally, "And besides, if actions speak louder than words, Shouldn't all this be showed to you not told to you" Should be, "And besides, if actions speak louder than words, shouldn't this all be showed to you, and not told to you?"
Other than that, I'd say the only other thing you'd need to work on is making this flow slightly better. It's a little clunky in some places, but that can be fixed if you play with some of the words a bit.
Overall, this is a really good poem! Once you fix up the grammar, and work on the flow, it will be even better!
Keep on writing, and have a good day or night!
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