Young Writers Society

Hi FourLeafClover! I'm here to review your poem here

The first thing I noticed while reading this poem was that you didn't include any periods (except in the final line), just commas. Although periods certainly are not required in any poem, I think that it would've been nice to place a few here and there just to indicate separate thoughts/ideas, as well as offer a place for the reader to take a breath. For example, I feel that a period would've fit in right after the first and third lines, but as mentioned before, it's not absolutely necessary.

I appreciate how you have your poem set up in tercets, with the end of each line rhyming with two other ones. I like how it sounds when you read it aloud, and I think this makes your writing flow well.

As for the content of your poem, I think this is something that a lot of people can relate to, myself included. Some of my closest friends have moved far away, and sometimes thinking about the distance between us makes it hard. I especially liked these lines in particular:

"And though your hand is not in mine,

Our souls are still combined

And the stars must have aligned"

Hello! Book_Dragon here for a quick review. I apologize in advance because I'm new to these, but I'll try my best.
First of all, I love the subject. I definitely relate to the moving and the friends moving deal.
Let's see...
The poem itself is very good. I like the rhyme scheme you chose! The only thing I would change is maybe add periods after every three lines. Or perhaps change some words so you don't start a sentence with "and" two times in a row.
Good job again!
-BD