Published January 7, 2011
Do you remember
Those long nights
We spent underneath the stars
Listening, talking, wishing, waiting?
Do you remember
The day so long ago
That you held me in your arms
And told me you loved me so?
Do you remember
That harsh, cold, blizzard
When you spoke the words
That were as cold and icy as the storm outside?
I remember
The night I wished for you to be mine
The day you filled my heart
The day you broke it
I remember
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A good poem mate... It surely invokes emotions and that is really good...
It somehow or the other will always relate to the reader...
Really a very good one...
It surely did remind me of my ex
Keep writing mate...
PM me for anything...
I'll cut straight to the chase.
The first stanza is good. I have one suggestion for the second:
And you finish with an amazing "I remember." Love that.
I applaud your ability to affect readers' emotions with this poem. Your placement and line breaking is flawless. I also simply adore the fact that the first three stanzas are questions, and then you, in a way, answer the questions in the last one. Very nice.
Hopefully you found my review helpful in one way or another. Keep writing!