Hello! I see that you are new! I hope to see more of your works sooner or later as I think each person has to show their potential to its fullest to the reviewers and readers so we can see how much you got and what we can actually help you with. You can always ask questions if I am able to answer them and help you. As a first work, I can not say that we expect a long novel with everything perfectly written so no worries. The first is the beginning and it gets better if you work hard.
The problem in this work is not only that it is short, but also because it has no proper punctuation on the right places like commas and others. For a story, even if it is shorter than usual, you need to have details and somehow let us 'see' the scenery. The details form the frame that we, readers, use to imagine it all that is in your story and how it looks like, making it more realistic and interesting. I will edit the short story of yours below to show an example of an edit. I hope it helps.
A man named Sam who has a big bushy beard and sparkling blue eyes always takes long walks in the woods. One night he decided to go for a walk in the cold bright moonlight. Holding his crisp cold water, he sees a figure in the distance, feeling a bit worried about this figure. It gets closer to him ashe starts to feel[/b] scared, so scared he fled from the dark evil figure.
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