Hi there, Roxy here!
It has potentail, but it was a but of an anticlimax to be honest, I was expecting you to tell me about the thrill of the ride, about the joys and the highs of the danger and how one near death experience isn't enough to stop you riding, I was expecting to be blown away by your overbaring passion, but you just dont really have this here!
I think that this is more of an "outline" for a poem, and now you need to go flesh it out with details, imagry and emotion!
As I said, the piece has got potential, and so have you, so keep building on this and the result will be a fantastic piece!
Keep on writitng!
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