Fieldeyes

hello! catsz here to leave a review (its been so long since ive done one so I hope it goes well ToT) let's dive into it!

Beside the road,
in the fields at night,

two red lights glare—
or are those eyes?

and the metal base—
its willowy legs.

I pass right by,
my thoughts drifting away,

but I wonder,
what other things
watch from the fields?

Omg thank you guys for all the feedback!

Hi! Dragonight here to leave a review on this brief poem.

That was straight dragon FIRE

The description is brief but to the point and I was able to imagine the scene clearly enough to find suspense in the question, are those eyes?

I loved the word you chose, willowy legs. It is one I have not heard often and fits the both the story itself and the poetic way of telling it.

I also sometimes find my thoughts drifting to wonder what is out there when traveling at night. The poem ends well and lets the reader's imagination continue past the ending. Well done.


Some loose scales

I couldn't find any real critiques for this one. Keep up the good work.


Final wisdom of the dragon friend

This poem is concise but well structured and has quite vivid imagery for the amount of description in it. If this is a good example of your poetry I would say you are very talented at it. I would love to see how a larger poem or story of yours would read.

May blazing dragon-fire light your path and ignite the flames of your inspiration.

Excellent use of short lines and limited words to create some excellent imagery. I liked this a lot.

How ominous... this reminds me of a time two years ago when I was visiting my grandparents. One night we all gathered in a field in the dark trying to see an aurora borealis and I found myself wondering if anything was watching us as we watched the sky. I still think about that night on occasion.
I like how you mention that even though you drove past the lights, you were still wondering afterward what things might have been watching you from the fields. It's interesting to think about what might be watching us as we watch them.

Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the devious S’more?

Top Graham Cracker - This is a poem inspired by a late drive. It seems like the narrator has gone past another car, but for just a moment, the red headlights look like eyes…but they aren’t eyes…right?

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I have no recommendations to make as of right now, but if you wish to expand on this, then you may.

Chocolate Bar - I love that you were inspired by a late night drive. Strange things happen to the mind when one is up late. I also like how you ask the question of what else could be watching in the fields, because I feel like a lot of us, whether we are walking or driving, wonder what could be waiting in the shadows late at night and if we can really trust what we see. There are only a few lines in this poem, but that is enough, because oftentimes, the most horrible manifestations are all up to our imagination.

Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, an eerie poem that was rather enchanting to read! I enjoyed reading this and will think now of the many things that may or may not lurk in the night! Now…

I wish you a fantastical day/night! ^v^

Alright, but this is great! I like how you managed to capture the whole vibe in relatively short poem very well - I can feel creeps on my back even as I read this on a warm sunny day. Also how you left what is really in the field a mystery? So cool.

Hi there! Just dropping by. I was intrigued by this because I've never read horror poetry before and I was curious. The sparse detail is great to get a sort of vague uneasiness across but I feel like this was really underdeveloped. I think you should consider stretching it and building it up more.

Some foreshadowing can go a long way! Just really build up to the horror aspect instead of dropping into it without any preamble.

Nice work!