(Consider this deleted)

by Fand
  • September 30, 2006
  • Poetry
  • Other

Had to delete it due to the rules of a contest I entered this poem in... sorry!

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Caligula's Launderette
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Caligula's Launderette wrote a review · Sat Sep 30, 2006 11:46 pm

Beautiful as always, hon.

I am torn between telling you that you need more punctuation in the second stanza, and telling you it's fine the way it is.

How about that for some constructive criticism. ;)

Kelle



Not tryna sound like a houseplant but sometimes all you need is food water and sun and suddenly everything is better
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