Published October 31, 2011
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Hey There -
Wow. I was thoroughly impressed. I am Korean and I have never heard of Sijo. Go figure!
Anyway - I liked this a lot. There is a grace and flow, and as unoriginal as this sounds, it was like a river , with its currents and flows. But - this, unlike a river, had no predictablilty. I loved that. It was intesting to read. A lot of great imagery. Wonderful.
It was sad. You have a very effective style. I could feel that emotion. Nice.
Please forgive me for my lack of responce - I am in a rush tonight.
Keep it up, Euhuman!!!
Best Regards -
IamHathor22
That is the quality of Sijo, it must have a sing song quality. Every three lines make a separate Sijo, aye
It is not that good, because the structure gets out of hand in english, just like Haiku
Well, this intro might help you
http://thenegativesign.wordpress.com/sijo/
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I really like this poem. What I liked about it the most was that it flowed well that it almost resembled a song. When I started reading, and I actually was listening to music, the words actually flowed well with the music that it could have been the lyrics if we tried which is a really good skill. I'm not too familiar with asian poetry except haikus so I can't really give you a opinion about how you presented this but you managed to keep my attention. Good job and keep writing.