Published August 30, 2011
Points:
Time spent:
IP address:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
139,448 Literary Works • 672,565 Reviews
Thank you really very much. So so appreciated. New here so I am not aware how to respond individually
1- Thank you for loving my story. I like writing small passages.
2-Haha I am glad I brought out those thoughts in words. It is fascinating and frustrating to see someone almost steal your thoughts isn't it. (it is for me, pardon). Jacob is an imaginary character as you see him lurking behind, in the shadows. There always there... The questions left unanswered gives you opportunity to make it go on. My story will never end like yours. But does a story ever end? Thanks for stopping by =) the main character is sad because what makes us all so. Slice of life =)
3-Thank you for your best wishes. If you really mean them =p
Hey. This is a good one. Your imagery is real good. i liked the way the story moves. Especially the thoughts of the main character. The lines, "So what if life’s not a lot of what I wanted and had? " That struck a chord. Been there myself, trust me.
. Anyways, a good read. Keep writing and best wishes!
This is....Great!!
I say this to myself about 12 times a day. It's like you went into my head and pulled out all my frustrations and put it into words.
Just a little sad it ended. I wanted more...who's Jacob? and why does the main character feel this way? Why can't her introduce his friends? It just left a lot of questions I had unanswerd. I love details! other than that I love love loved it
Happy writing!
Hi, I love your story.
"I stop in that quiet street and think at the thought. When will I have a life of my own? I have it already; dammit! I have a better one. I am a better person. I know better people. So what if life's not a lot of what I wanted and had? So what?...
These words in particular struck out from the rest. Kudos and Keep writing.