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Dreaming of you

by EstelPax


I still dream of you.

I still dream of us.

I still remember of the day,you said you loved me.

I still remember you death,Anakin.

I still dream of what could of been.

I still dream of what should of been ,our family.

I still dream you,Anakin Solo.

I still can hear you voice and I'll remember it always.

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Sat Apr 28, 2007 5:14 am
Chevy says...



The repetitiveness kind of took away from the poem and I would also suggest altering the last line. Other than that, there's a good theme here and some potential from the way I see it.





A woman knows the face of the man she loves as a sailor knows the open sea.
— Honore de Balzac