Published April 9, 2007
I still dream of you.
I still dream of us.
I still remember of the day,you said you loved me.
I still remember you death,Anakin.
I still dream of what could of been.
I still dream of what should of been ,our family.
I still dream you,Anakin Solo.
I still can hear you voice and I'll remember it always.
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The repetitiveness kind of took away from the poem and I would also suggest altering the last line. Other than that, there's a good theme here and some potential from the way I see it.