Dreaming of you

by EstelPax
  • April 9, 2007
  • Short Story
  • Fanfiction

I still dream of you.

I still dream of us.

I still remember of the day,you said you loved me.

I still remember you death,Anakin.

I still dream of what could of been.

I still dream of what should of been ,our family.

I still dream you,Anakin Solo.

I still can hear you voice and I'll remember it always.

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Chevy commented · Sat Apr 28, 2007 5:14 am

The repetitiveness kind of took away from the poem and I would also suggest altering the last line. Other than that, there's a good theme here and some potential from the way I see it.



so many languages have fallen / off of the edge of the world / into the dragon's mouth.
— Lucille Clifton